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Wendy Flora
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0 posted 2001-01-21 01:32 AM



gravity

friction wasn't working today
but thank God for gravity
the glass slid from my hands
to shatter on the linoleum
finely cut crystal fragmenting
into innumerable pieces
how fitting
i had been thinking of you

© Copyright 2001 Wendy Flora - All Rights Reserved
Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597

1 posted 2001-01-21 02:06 AM


Wendy,
"Sharp little piece" , this.  I like it.
Love the short form . . .
Krawdad

ellie LeJeune
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2 posted 2001-01-21 10:15 AM


How fitting that you should write this short but poignant poem. Aamzing how many little pieces our hearts can break in.

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

kcsgrandma
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since 2000-09-24
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Presque Isle, ME
3 posted 2001-01-21 01:00 PM


This is a cutting tribute to a shattered relationship.  You've packed a lot into this short poem.  Very nicely done.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

Wendy Flora
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4 posted 2001-01-21 04:59 PM


thank you.
-wen

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5 posted 2001-01-22 02:27 PM


Nice one here. I liked this one a lot. Good descriptions here.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

pegasus111
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ocala, fl, usa
6 posted 2001-01-22 03:42 PM


very clever piece..well done

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


kaile
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7 posted 2001-01-24 05:33 AM


the conceot of glass shattering in relation to a broken relationship has been done many times but i want to say this was done particularly well...

short intense piece..thank you for the read

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