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ellie LeJeune
Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

0 posted 2001-01-17 08:20 PM


Shall I dance a new dance?
Shall I sing a new song?

The old song was filled
with words of deception.
A love song gone wrong.
A shallow tune,
the beat off-key,
No depth of melody.
the instruments
out of tune.

The dancers have left
the floor.

It is time for a new song,
that is only mine.
Filled with rich melodies.
A deep resounding
orchestration,
a waltz
of immeasurable
beauty and truth.

My turn to dance
to the beat
of my own hearts desire
in tune with the universe,
as I conduct a new
symphony
of my very own.
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A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.


[This message has been edited by ellie LeJeune (edited 01-17-2001).]

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deleeme
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
1 posted 2001-01-17 10:00 PM


Dear Ellie,
I see this as a launch of faith in a brave new world, unshackled from former noise once considered music, but now recognized for what it is or was. And now ready to really make the music you always wanted to. What an upbeat positive message-life does go on & calls for change looking ahead to new adventures & dreams.  Follow Your Dreams,
                   David

kcsgrandma
Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME
2 posted 2001-01-18 01:10 AM


Very nice, Ellie, and I do identify with much of what you have written.  I'm so glad you can see that your own music was always the most beautiful of all.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

bestgirl911
Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551
Clio, MI , United We Stand
3 posted 2001-01-18 09:13 AM


Ellie...

I too danced to that old song....and I am waiting patiently for the new song to begin. This is a beautiful tribute to self-realization.

Ranea

Gene
Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935
Colorado, USA
4 posted 2001-01-18 12:40 PM


Ellie,

You wrote a beautiful melody of your very own. I think I can dance to this one.

Gene

JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
5 posted 2001-01-18 08:34 PM


That's the spirit. Make up your own dance moves. That's certainly my plan.

Joy

Romy
Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida
6 posted 2001-01-19 10:36 AM


I also read this as a poem about self-discovery and improving life.  I'm still trying to create my own song, still searching for the right words.  I like your use of metaphor here, it allows the reader to interpret the message in his or her own way!  Great job!
Munda
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
7 posted 2001-01-19 11:26 AM


Ellie, I never looked at life/love like that. Quite a challenge! Great poem!
William P Bussey
Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 188

8 posted 2001-01-19 07:16 PM


Ellie, sounds like your well rid of that old dancer, a better one is sure to come along, hang in there.
Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

9 posted 2001-01-19 07:29 PM


My turn to dance
to the beat
of my own hearts desire
in tune with the universe,
as I conduct a new
symphony
of my very own.

this is a wonderfully positive poem Ellie, grasp those dreams and bring them alive.

Maree  

I can't help but feel my heart fall between the pregnant
pause of all you won't say and all I can not ask

~Jewel~

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