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kaile
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0 posted 2001-01-04 05:45 AM


to gain a fleeting control
on his impermanence,
in verse he places a time capsule,
hoping that his essence will live on
when others stumble upon his words

will others however see the person behind his words
and learn all that he has to impart

or will they instead notice
the spelling errors,
the missing punctuation marks,
the almost corny cliches,
the mismatched metaphors?

lucky he wasnt bothered by such considerations
or else he might not have written


© Copyright 2001 heng kaile - All Rights Reserved
pegasus111
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1 posted 2001-01-04 08:19 AM


i noe dats rite  

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


kcsgrandma
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2 posted 2001-01-05 12:13 PM


LOL at Pegasus.    I haven't noticed any of those things in your poetry, Kaile, so I doubt your descendants will, either.     I'm pretty picky about that stuff, actually. It's an interesting question though.  Kind of like not giving people a chance because of outward appearance, isn't it?

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

brian madden
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3 posted 2001-01-06 09:04 AM


Kaile, i am sure that they will remember the magic and power of your words, I know I will.  

There's a feeling of contentment Now that you are here I feel satisfied I belong
inside Your velvet heaven" Depeche mode

Dennis L. White
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Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.
4 posted 2001-01-06 09:29 AM


Kaile,
  If we only pay attention to grammatical form, the message might get lost in the shuffle, I agree, Form and prefection is secondary to the Message. Good Message for us ALL!
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has passed
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)


Wikket
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5 posted 2001-01-06 12:42 PM


Gotcha Kaile...don't judge a book by it's cover!  I'm on it doggone it!    

     ~~Jamie


I mean the opposite of what I say. You've got it now? No, it's the other way. ~Bruce Bennett

Suzanne Arlene
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6 posted 2001-01-06 09:19 PM


Ya know  the exact thing happened to me today. I had written a poem for my sister on the birth of her son   and  i asked her how she liked it. She said she liked it but i had misspelled the word "there".I thought to myself   Gee  if that had been me recieving a poem from someone i never would have said that.It hurt  but i will get over it cause the poem is what ment the most to me.Funny though when i checked my files  the poem was spelled correctly.  Go figure . Suzanne    
dgvarner
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7 posted 2001-01-06 11:34 PM


kaile..i'm a bit of a perfectionist..(tho slacking a bit as i get older..!LOL)  so i do notice such errors..(however, mostly in my own stuff...)  but i still believe the msg is the most important part..and i beleive those who remember only the errors, werent meant to get anything out of it anyway..  

some get it..some dont..  

{{and to suzanne...perhaps, your sister didnt know how to say..'thank you'...sometimes a loss brings out the wrong words.. ?}}

hugs, g


"sometimes a closed door provides us with walls to lean on....."
-kathleen vibbert



Joannak
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8 posted 2001-01-07 05:28 AM


kaile,

I so enjoyed this one.  I have to admit, spelling and grammatical errors are a pet peeve of mine, but I always read for content first.  And most importantly, I always look for your postings to read    

joanna


What better way to become immortal than to wake up each day and write? Ray Bradbury



Mon Cherie
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9 posted 2001-12-05 10:34 AM


Hmmm... That really is some kinda legacy. You have taken a serious thought and gave it a comical twist. Good job...  

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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