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shira
Member

since 2000-12-12

Posts 88
Hamburg, PA

0 posted 2001-01-03 11:58 AM

Spider’s Web

cautiously, carefully
I step once
testing its strength
before beginning this journey
along the glistening,
glittering silken thread
that brings me to you,
your waiting arms,
loving kiss, gentle caress,
ready to love, care,
to hold and be
with me
what has been destroyed
or never was
with him

you call out,
I smile
the strand wavers
but I continue
finding my way
carefully, slowly,
almost there,
when I hear him
calling me
back to him
even though
he let me go,
my future changed,
now with you and
not him

a moments hesitation
I turn to him
which way now-
forward or back?
neither
the strand breaks
I’m falling,
my balance gone
my confidence lost
falling...
          f
          a
          l
          l
          i
          n
          g
          .
          .
          .
to be caught by
silken threads,
waking the beast-
before I can move
its tines sink in

pegasus111
Member Elite

since 2000-07-27

Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa

1 posted 2001-01-03 12:30 PM

very interesting analogy...has a nice surreal quality that I like..looking forward to more.

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2001-01-03 06:37 PM

perfectly expressed...it is so true too..

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-01-04 02:26 PM

Spider's wed, i love this analogy. I often use it to be a symbol of how delicate life can be, yet how much work it takes you to make it what it is.
Nice job on this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Suzanne Arlene
Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 377
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2001-01-04 05:17 PM

Oh that was a goody. I enjoyed that very much. Took my mind on a wonderful journey. Suzanne

kcsgrandma
Senior Member

since 2000-09-24

Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME

5 posted 2001-01-05 12:49 PM

Wow! Nice work, though a bit scary, and definitely not encouraging for those of use who are indecisive!

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite

since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

6 posted 2001-01-05 07:54 AM

Beautifully intricate and woven analogy! Choices are scary ...Ellie

Belief is a truth held in the mind; faith is a fire in the heart.

Joseph Fort Newton

shira
Member

since 2000-12-12

Posts 88
Hamburg, PA

7 posted 2001-01-05 07:13 PM

Thanks for all the great comments everyone... glad you liked the poem. If anybody has ever been in this "sticky" situation before, I think a spiders web describes it perfectly, including the loss of control that can sometimes occur in these situations. Ah yes, we do find the most wonderful inspiration for writing in daily life, dont we?

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