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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
This was written for a dear friend of mine. To Meet The child I Gave Away To meet the child I gave away My daughter I have never seen To hold you once I daily pray No answers to what could have been My daughter I have never seen Was your life filled with love thus far? No answers to what could have been To let you go has left a scar Was your life filled with love thus far? I'd die to hear your lovely voice To let you go has left a scar To give you up was not my choice I'd die to hear your lovely voice Embrace you with this mother's heart To give you up was not my choice There is no cure for utter smart Embrace you with this mother's heart You're in my heart, my soul, each day Is there a cure for utter smart? Live long enough to see that day You're in my heart, my soul, each day To hold you once I daily pray Live long enough to see the day To meet the child I gave away Munda |
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Wikket Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340Santa Clara, CA USA |
Very touching Munda...VERY. Thanks for sharing it with us! ~~Jamie    "...I mean, when I first met you, you were all like, 'Oh Phooey, I burned the darn muffins.' Now, you walk into a bar, and sailors come runnin' out!" |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
I have never been in this situation, but your poem brought tears to my eyes, imagining it. It is a lovely form, too, btw, one I'm not familiar with. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
I agree with Jamie--this is very Touchiing, and very Good. I tried a Pantoum once when I was at my brother's house- they are not easy. I therefore, admire you in this lovely output. David To put together words & rhyme--and touch a life--is so sublime! Thank God for such precious contact! (D.L.White) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I can only imagine the agony. Great expression, Munda. Denise |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Munda, What a beautiful work you have framed here. Pulling the heart strings, this one is! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
Munda.. This poem hit so close to home...as an adoptee I have often wondered if I've been missed..Thanks for sharing the other point of view. Best |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Munda; this is beautifully written and so sad too. I can't imagine the pain and feelings of loss... Ellie Belief is a truth held in the mind; faith is a fire in the heart. Joseph Fort Newton |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
is there any greater pain that a mother's loss of a child ?..I would be hard pressed to imagine it. this piece reeks of anguish..may you find peace.. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
you are very good at these pantoums, munda...and im impressed with the way you managed to make it read as if it were just another regular poem.... |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Munda, I don't know what to say.. it's a beautifully written poem, and it still bemuses me, as to how such a terrible thing can be portrayed so perfectly that I can say I 'enjoyed' reading about it.. but I did, and I think I'm going to cry now, hehe.. All my love Munda.. Lynne [This message has been edited by Yu Lan (edited 12-29-2000).] |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Munda, your poem is so heart wrenching. The pain of a child gone and not knowing its fate. I pray the mother gets to see her child some day soon. Love and hugs, ME |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
The enduring pain so finely written...as it circles around and around, never ending. The form is wonderfully suited for the subject. Well done! "Come...dance with me, into my world of words." |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A very touching poem and I hope that child and mother will be reunited. It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
I guess you've given me a little bit of understanding to what it would be like in this situation, sad but beauiful tho  Life has got to chnage, Nothing stays the same, Soon it will be time, For me to move on. |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Wow!!! This is a powerfully written pantoum. Great job! Mike |
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