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raleighbttrfly
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0 posted 2000-12-13 10:43 PM


Is this it
Is this how it is to be
Both of us ignoring our need
Friends rings with an empty tone
It echoes with the pain of being still alone
Your hand I’ve held
Your lips I have kissed
All of these things again am I to miss
You say you are lost
Have nothing to give
Even claim you have no reason to live
Your pain I can hold
And strength I can lend
But in your mind you will not bend



I am not always lonely even if I am always alone

© Copyright 2000 Amberlyn - All Rights Reserved
pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
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ocala, fl, usa
1 posted 2000-12-13 10:50 PM


this was a nice tight read..well done.

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


Broken_Winged_Angel
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since 2000-04-06
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Small Town, Somewhere
2 posted 2000-12-14 12:02 PM


very nicely put.  
Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
Posts 299
Virginia, USA
3 posted 2000-12-14 10:42 AM


You give your all to someone else, but them taking it is another story...some people just don't want to change, some just don't want to love.
Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
4 posted 2000-12-14 10:54 AM


No this is not it. It will change, for better or for worse and life will continue somehow. Well written !
Moon Dust
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5 posted 2000-12-14 06:20 PM


I like the style

Life has got to chnage,
Nothing stays the same,
Soon it will be time,
For me to move on.


kaile
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singapore
6 posted 2000-12-15 12:51 PM


short intense read..the last line was especially haunting....
raleighbttrfly
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since 2000-11-21
Posts 160
Raleigh NC
7 posted 2000-12-15 11:10 AM


thank you all for your thoughts. W.H.Bob you got it right I think (sigh).

I am not always lonely even if I am always alone

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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Lansing, MI USA
8 posted 2000-12-15 08:17 PM


raleighbttrfly,

Well said.  It isn't easy to acceot, but you cannot make them want the same things you do.  If they do not see, perhaps it is their loss.  Hope the writing helps.

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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