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Dennis L. White
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0 posted 2000-12-01 03:31 PM


Rings around the moon
Frosty breath hangs suspended
Between heav'n and earth

Hoot owl, nearby tree
Alerts of this intrusion
Echoes through meadow

Weary travelers rest
Chill engulfs body and soul
Last thoughts of warm home

12-1-2000






[This message has been edited by Dennis L. White (edited 12-01-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-12-01 04:03 PM


Dennis~
Breathtakingly beautiful.
*sighing here*
~*Marge*~


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ellie LeJeune
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2 posted 2000-12-01 06:02 PM


Wonderful, Bro...You're still the King!

Belief is a truth held in the mind; faith is a fire in the heart.

Joseph Fort Newton



JOY 14
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3 posted 2000-12-01 08:30 PM


"echoes through meadow"
lovely, Dennis.

Joy

dgvarner
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4 posted 2000-12-01 09:03 PM


VERY nice, haiku king     
i like
..however..i'm gonna have to go get me a blanket now..     

hugs, g
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5 posted 2000-12-02 09:59 PM


I thought this was great. Just like all your others. You're so good at haiku's!



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kcsgrandma
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6 posted 2000-12-02 10:46 PM


This reminds me of "Stopping by the Woods on a Snowy Evening", though I'm not sure why.  Nice feeling to this, Dennis.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

deleeme
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7 posted 2000-12-03 06:25 AM


Dear Dennis,
  I would say that with Haikus
  You have hit your stride
  But I would be wrong
  Your talent's so diversified!
  But you always give us
  A Portion of your Best
  With your wisdom,humor or descriptiveness
  Here we are truly Blest!
                 Love,
               David  

To put together words & rhyme--and touch a life--is so sublime! Thank God for such precious contact! (D.L.White)



pegasus111
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8 posted 2000-12-03 12:50 PM


I am sooooo jealous...lol

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


kaile
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9 posted 2000-12-04 12:54 PM


somehow, i liked the title a lot...i guess "weary" is a word i relate to a lot...and i must say that your last line "last thoughts of warm home" jolted me  a little


INclan
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10 posted 2000-12-05 08:03 AM


Dennis,

Man, that is cold(!)...beautiful, but really cold.  Must be why they call diamonds, "ICE."

INclan

Romy
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Plantation, Florida
11 posted 2000-12-05 01:45 PM


Dennis,

The image of travelers in the cold night, really comes through in this one!  I love the first stanza, especially this line;

"Frosty breath hangs suspended"

and your last line changed the tone of your poem for me in a big way;

"Last thoughts of warm home"

It gave me the shivers! Really, really nice job!

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