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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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Shadow Tender Slipping, slipping, slipping away reigns loose, tendrils untended tethers and anchors destroyed. Hot air balloon, escaped and free shadow tends the tender, now adrift; both independent, terrified. Basket taking flight, digging deep once hated, perhaps now fondly viewed ignoring the benevolence of hindsight. Horizon scanned for once loved home roots dried, dusty, dead, deep shadows once upon yesterday longings. Seems as if it’s all slipping running for broke, unrecognized headstone forests, meaningless markers. Slipping, nothing left to hang on to runaway reigns flap uselessly begging for once disdained keeper. Slipping away, crowd clamors for more demanding a second helping, “Give us what we want of you!” Desperate for a glimmer of understanding as balloon slowly drifts goodbye shadow tender laughing as we slip away. bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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pegasus111 Member Elite
since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219ocala, fl, usa |
cutting loose from old bonds and traditions can be both frightening and exhilarating. this was a well conceived piece..well done. the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
I'm impressed bleeding...This is very well written. Cutting away from old things is rather hard and scary...I love the way you used a hot air balloon to show it..  |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
thank you for your insightfull and helpfull comments! lol and i thought noone would "get" this one...lol bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
i know, i know...i am cheating horribly commenting just to get this back into "circulation"... but i really would like some comments on this one... i thought it the best of the lately submitted, but was largely overlooked by y'all...why? please let me know what you didn't like about this piece, ok? thanks bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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