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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME 
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My Brother My brother wrote His first poem. What he wrote I already knew In prose… But I cried for What we have ceased To be, because There was no time, No room, or Someone disliked Who we were, What we did, How we felt, What we believed. We amputated Parts of us And stuffed them Under a cushion, In a file drawer, In the deep freeze Under the year-old fish sticks. We tried to forget We were maimed. Nobody noticed, But we remembered. We missed the lost pieces Of us. One day we found Those who helped us Find ourselves. They did not complete us, But loved us completely. Against the rules, We loved them back. Now, miles apart, We stand together, No longer willing To hide who we are For the sake of peace, Daring at last To be free. Dona nobis pacem. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ah..this is intriguing and very well done.  |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
kcgranny, Standing up cheering! Wonderful! Your wisdom is exceeded only by the quality of this jewel...this is a keeper. Marcy |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
I saw myself in your poem. My brothers and I have overcome a past that only siblings can understand. It is a triumph to find peace at last, within family! The last line is perfect! Dona nobis pacem. Grant us peace. Excellent Job, your poetry is always so insightful! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I have not stood in your shoes, but is it all right if I say, "I understand"? I do! Thank you for sharing. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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kid D Member
since 2000-10-18
Posts 64 |
this is really well done, and i would say that debbie is right, only siblings can understand, but then sunshine blows that theory  i have not found my way back to my brothers and sister, but i do understand also i wrote one about my sibs once, though i don't write much about my family, will mail it if you would like for me to share it with you |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Thank you all for reading and replying. Poet deVine - Thanks for the "intriguing"! It was a struggle to get on paper, and it's great to have a positive response. Marcy - Thank you for the cheer and for the kind comments. I wish I really were wise. Debbie - Yes, siblings do understand some things nobody else does. Our family was never really at odds with each other, but life often takes you far away from your roots. I just recently learned that my brother have had some surprisingly similar experiences, things we didn't talk about until now. Thanks for understanding. Karilea - Of course it's all right to say you understand! We do not have to have stood in each other's shoes to have stood in the same places. Nobody's experience is exactly like mine, but everything I have felt has been felt by someone else. Poetry just helps us bridge the gaps, doesn't it? kid - I would love to see what you wrote about your sibs. This isn't really only about my brother (I actually have two, and a sister). It is about giving up parts of yourself to please others (in our cases, mostly our spouses), and trying to get those things back. That is why I was so impressed by what you posted here. Parts of it said exactly what I wanted to say. Thanks for sharing that. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful writing, Marilyn! Very well expressed! Denise |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Thank you, Denise. To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
awesome mar..i love this so much.. its odd how you dont find out about the familiar tales of yours and your siblings lives til later in life..my brother and i have had some good talks now that we're older..we seem to connect in many places although..he was never a conformist..loli know about this..being different to be the same.. one day we wake up and realize that we do indeed miss those pieces of us that we tucked away.. i'm glad you found your pieces hugs, dg "after a while, you learn the subtle difference between holding a hand and chaining a soul..." -V A Shoffstall |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Thanks, dg. You seem to have caught on about the missing pieces earlier than I did. Good for you! And it is surprising to realize how much like our brothers and sisters we can be without even realizing it. You know I always appreciate your comments. Glad you liked this. hugs To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
KCS~ Kind of like pieces of a puzzle that fit to make the whole picture. 'We stand together' That says it all for me. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
"United we stand, now and forever...In truth, divided we fall...Hand upon hand...brother to brother, no one shall be greater than all." ~Soundtrack from "Quest For Camelot". Your poem reminded me of this song... And I give you a standing ovation...  Very well put.. |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh kcs ~ How wonderfully you have written of the sibling thing....I had 3 older brothers, now I have just 1. We don't live near each other, but we now make a point of getting together a couple of times a year, and.... talk on the phone often. I often regret that it took losing the others before we finally realized we were all had left....But at least we enjoy the time we can share and our familes now stand together. Thanks for sharing this, it is wonderful. Bonnie |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
Yes, Marge, both our families and ourselves become puzzles sometimes. When you realize you have arrived at the same place, even if by different routes, you're halfway to solving the puzzle. Thanks for reading and commenting. And BWA, thanks for the standing ovation. This musician sees that as the perfect compliment. Thank you for your comments, Bonnie. I'm glad you're staying close to your brother. Too often people wait until it's too late to get close to the people who should be most important to them. It feels good to rediscover each other, doesn't it? To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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