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pegasus111
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0 posted 2000-10-25 11:43 AM


The fields evolve to a dingy brown
a far cry from the summer wealth
forest trees stand tall and stark
stripped of their children
ghostly sentinals to the season of death

Hunched against the ominous wind
he contemplates with sadness
the demise of his dear friends
and the inevitibility
of his own

He mourns the loss wistfully
his own indifference a grim reminder
of the ruthless expiration
of lost opportunity
the cold wind bites deeper

Punishing his silence
with numbing reality
we live and then we die
love completely today
that which matters most

For tomorrow may be but a dream
that never comes



the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 2000-10-25 04:58 PM


Wrapped perfectly! The final lines of this were an incredible ending - carpe diem!

Christopher

pegasus111
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2 posted 2000-10-25 06:29 PM


Christopher...thank you for the kind words..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

ellie LeJeune
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3 posted 2000-10-25 07:13 PM


Sometimes it takes that dark passage to see the light of hope that springs eternal. Beautifully written poem, the imagery superb as an analogy of hope lost and then discovered. Excellent!  Ellie

le coeur a ses raisons que la raison ne con-nait point....the heart has its reasons that reason knows nothing of..



Poet deVine
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4 posted 2000-10-25 08:00 PM


I love your use of imagery in this poem. Excellent job!  
wordancer
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5 posted 2000-10-25 09:06 PM


ah...yes, i know
Ron K. Fox
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6 posted 2000-10-25 09:36 PM


hauntingly beautiful. Ron
kcsgrandma
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7 posted 2000-10-26 12:20 PM


This is excellent, pegasus.  How true that we should love completely today!  Sometimes it does take confronting your own mortality to realize that.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

pegasus111
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8 posted 2000-10-26 08:24 AM


thank you my friends for the warm comments..."I am adrift in a sea of sorrow and tears, and only my words offer respite."
Pegasus

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
9 posted 2000-10-26 08:26 PM


This comes across as quiet desperation reconciled...

well done...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ



Alle'cram
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10 posted 2000-10-26 10:27 PM


A excellent write and a good shot of reality!   Marcy
pegasus111
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11 posted 2000-10-27 08:51 AM


Sunshine, Marcy, thank you for the positive feedback.

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


kid D
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12 posted 2000-10-27 09:42 AM


i agree with chris, was gonna paste your last two verses, but let me just say the word weaving was great and i love the way you tied up the end...just perfect  
pegasus111
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13 posted 2000-10-27 02:17 PM


Kid..you are very kind. thank you.

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost


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