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wordancer
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since 2000-07-30
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0 posted 2000-10-24 11:56 PM



...tick

can't sleep
dark night
emptiness
sigh, turn, toss
clock waits
hands tremble
wide-eyes
see nothing
slow weep
taste tears
can't sleep
…doze
startle!
up/down
down/up
close window
cold pane
dark memories
lost in reflection
can't sleep
distant time
churning mind
don't think
rocking chair
slow beat
cat purrs
no ease
can't sleep
waiting for…
morning time
waiting for…
touch of time
waiting for…
end of time
waiting for…

...tock



Lady Noggins
aka Wordancer

...come, dance with me...in my world of words...


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Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
1 posted 2000-10-25 12:10 PM


Oh my, can I relate to this poem, seems it's my every night. Great job describing the feeling.  
kcsgrandma
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since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME
2 posted 2000-10-25 12:35 PM


Beautifully and painfully done, Lady!  What an eternity between tick and tock!

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

wordancer
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since 2000-07-30
Posts 809
VA
3 posted 2000-10-25 10:15 AM


Yeah, the long drawn out minutes of a dark, endless night...where seconds are a eternity.

Thanks Lost Dreame and kcsgrandma

-Lady

pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
4 posted 2000-10-25 06:22 PM


I know....

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

DawnG
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5 posted 2000-10-26 04:38 PM


Describes my night last night and even my day today. The silence is deafening..

                                Dawn

DawnG
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6 posted 2000-10-26 04:38 PM


Describes my night last night and even my day today. The silence is deafening..

                                Dawn

Denise
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7 posted 2000-10-26 09:04 PM


Very well written, Lady!

Denise

Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
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Texas
8 posted 2000-10-26 10:07 PM


I can relate, had one last night. Very good writing.  Marcy
bestgirl911
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since 2000-10-04
Posts 551
Clio, MI , United We Stand
9 posted 2000-10-27 01:21 PM


what a accurate description of a lonely heart on a endless dark night. love it.

Best

kid D
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since 2000-10-18
Posts 64

10 posted 2000-10-27 02:54 PM


this is great, i rarely don't sleep at night, so i am lucky, but on the rare times that i don't...you hit it perfect....great format...and i agree with kcsgrandma...the way you put it between the tick and the tock   great work
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