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Romy
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0 posted 2000-10-14 10:09 AM


Fierce dark clouds gather
there are rumbles of attack
against the blue sky

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Denise
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1 posted 2000-10-14 10:22 AM


Very good, Debbie! I've got my umbrella handy!

Denise

kcsgrandma
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2 posted 2000-10-14 12:54 PM


  This is an unprovoked attack, I'm sure. Very nice imagery.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

kaile
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3 posted 2000-10-14 01:35 PM


Nice one debbie

maybe you can write one about how the blue sky plans to counterattack

Dennis L. White
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4 posted 2000-10-14 08:10 PM


Debbie,
  Your few well chosen words display a vivid picture here, good one!
Dennis :^)< !signature-->

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has passed
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)




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Victoria
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5 posted 2000-10-14 10:08 PM


i wish we would get some rain here in Texas..we need it bad..nice haiku indeed.

                             ~Victoria~

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Romy
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6 posted 2000-10-14 10:53 PM


Thanks to everybody who replied to my haiku!

Kaile, I thought a counter attack sounded like a good idea, so here's my attempt!

The sun shoots its beams
evaporating the clouds
before they do harm.

The war is over and the day is saved!



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