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Joannak
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since 2000-03-11
Posts 121
Indiana, USA

0 posted 2000-10-08 09:21 PM


Chain saws, motor boats,
lawn mowers, jet skis - buzzing
mechanical bees.
"I'm on vacation!", I cry,
"Where is my peace and quiet?"

jk


What better way to become immortal than to wake up each day and write? Ray Bradbury



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kcsgrandma
Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME
1 posted 2000-10-09 12:21 PM


Well-put!  There aren't too many places to escape to any more.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.
2 posted 2000-10-09 03:54 PM


Joannak,
  Vacations don't always go as expected, LOL.
I think the form you are using here is tanka rather than senryu. Sounds like you need to find some loons and chill out.
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has passed
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)



Moon Dust
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since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK
3 posted 2000-10-09 04:45 PM


You cant get no peace no where, good one

Sometimes you have to let go and move on,
But never let go of the memories.


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