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kcsgrandma
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0 posted 2000-10-08 06:54 PM


                Judas

The betrayal was not so much in
Your last kiss as your first,
For with it you stole my youth
And all my dreams for life
And finally condemned
My pierced-through heart to lie
Waiting for an Easter
That may never come.
Could what you gained have been
Worth all that it cost me?

© Copyright 2000 Marilyn Gordon - All Rights Reserved
ellie LeJeune
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1 posted 2000-10-08 07:02 PM


Dear K; This is a chilling, but beautifully written poem of betrayal. I've known terrible betrayal and it's pain, by this poem, so have you. It is davastating! Ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

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2 posted 2000-10-08 07:54 PM


KCS~
Wow !
This one aches with a pain that needs to be let go.

'The betrayal was not so much in
Your last kiss as your first'


Quite a line of thought.
~*Marge*~


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Denise
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3 posted 2000-10-08 08:01 PM


Excellent expression of betrayal. Very well done!

Denise

kcsgrandma
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4 posted 2000-10-08 11:36 PM


Ellie - I'm sorry you have been betrayed.  Yes, it is painful.

Marge - As with any pain, I think, this one comes and goes.  I suspect Ellie would agree with this.  The reason the first kiss was a betrayal is that he knew (as I didn't for more than 20 years)that he could not love me the way I wanted to be loved.

Denise - Thank you.  I was afraid it might be a bit heavy for the Pub.  I appreciate your support.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

dgvarner
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5 posted 2000-10-09 06:35 PM


WOW K!  this hurts all over...i think many of us can relate to the pain this one talks about...and the story...

wonderfully written..

hugs, dg



she doesnt want the kind of love she can live with--she wants the kind she cant live without
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vlraynes
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6 posted 2000-10-09 08:41 PM



kcs-
  wow...such heartfelt pain in this one.
  great job of conveying these feelings.
  wonderful write.  

  -vicky




"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
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kcsgrandma
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7 posted 2000-10-09 11:36 PM


Thanks dg and Vicky.  I guess the reason we write is that it is a way for us to say something that we can't express any other way. This is an old pain, but one that opened my eyes to others' pain.  And I am still finding, through this writing, that almost everyone has experienced it in some way. Thanks for reading and understanding.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

CitiZen-One
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8 posted 2000-10-10 04:42 PM


Unbelievably Profound. The pain pouring out of this is unimaginable. Written in simplicity, it cut through me on multiple levels. Such immensity in such few words. This is probably one of the most speak to me poems I have read on this forum. You have touched me with this piece. I felt the words and I even felt some of the pain.
kcsgrandma
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9 posted 2000-10-11 12:16 PM


CitiZen-One, I am speechless.  Thank you for letting me know how this touched you. If this speaks to people, I suppose it is because the pain is/was real, and as has already been pointed out here, pain is universal.  Thanks for hearing what I had to say.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

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