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pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
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0 posted 2000-10-02 12:57 PM


The night descends
a dark blanket
invading languid thoughts
casting long shadows
in the fading light
shadows which reach
into the mind
like tentacles
magnifying the loneliness

The absence of one
so dear to the faltering spirit
presses deeply without respite
into the dark recesses
of a damaged soul
the long eventless days
drone on
into insufferable night

This pain
a stranger to relief
like a sharp knife
inflicts innumerable tiny wounds
on a damaged heart
each slow beat
fainter than the last
thumps a lonely message
on the heavy night air

   miss you...

   need you...

   want you...



the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

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Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
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1 posted 2000-10-02 02:52 PM


Phew lonely lonely lonely.............nice writing Pegasus.......very lonely.

Jon      

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2 posted 2000-10-02 03:54 PM


can't tell you how many night i've had like that, but I like the way you've done it

There are enough colours in the world,
To paint your own dreams,
You won't get them,
Till you try.


ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
3 posted 2000-10-02 05:56 PM


Pegasus; My heart feels this loneliness for you. I pray that all turns out well, hopefully your prayers and dreams will come true! Nothing is impossible with God! Ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

kcsgrandma
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since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME
4 posted 2000-10-03 12:04 PM


A song for everyone who has ever suffered a broken heart, which I suppose is nearly all of us.  It hits pretty close to home, which is to say, well done.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
5 posted 2000-10-03 08:30 AM


thank you my friends for the kind words. there may be some light at the end of the tunnel(finally).

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

wordancer
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since 2000-07-30
Posts 809
VA
6 posted 2000-10-03 01:11 PM


quote:
each slow beat
fainter than the last
thumps a lonely message
on the heavy night air

   miss you...

   need you...

   want you...



No matter how faint the distant echoes are, they are heard, as they reverberate through the soul of the one who listens...

[This message has been edited by Lady Noggins (edited 10-03-2000).]

Chanson
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since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle
7 posted 2000-10-04 02:16 AM


pegasus, this brings a tear to my eye....soooo very touching. ~hugs~  

...chanson~

Music, tonal clear & pure,
Caresses the harshest of curves.
-me, Song of Gesture



pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
8 posted 2000-10-04 09:57 AM


Chanson..thanks for the hug..you are very kind

Lady..I am so glad you decided to check out this forum..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

wordancer
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since 2000-07-30
Posts 809
VA
9 posted 2001-03-11 02:00 AM


...this was as I remember...
twilah
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since 2000-09-25
Posts 91
Maine, USA
10 posted 2001-03-11 07:12 AM


Pegasus..the heart is the doorway to the soul..it is said..loneliness can be very cruel sometimes. "Miss you, need you, want you"...echoes from the past to many. Your heart was poured out in this poem....and I, for one, can relate...beautiful, but sad....Twilah
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11 posted 2001-03-11 09:45 AM


It's worth a second look I can tell you

Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning.


kismetkelsey
Junior Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 32
Canada
12 posted 2001-03-12 07:41 PM


A lonesome poem but one that I am sure a lot of us can relate to.I have had visits from the night spectors of loneliness too.I was very moved by this poignant poem.I 'll be reading more of your work.
Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
Posts 299
Virginia, USA
13 posted 2001-03-13 03:49 PM


Lost and lonely...A sad piece here, Pegasus...Beautifully written, I know I'm echoing whats been said, but thought my own two cents would hold some value at any rate.
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