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ellie LeJeune
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0 posted 2000-09-02 12:45 PM


Cinderella me
But not to the ball I go
clean the bowl instead


[This message has been edited by ellie LeJeune (edited 09-02-2000).]

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Little_Spyro
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since 2000-01-09
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San Diego, CA, USA
1 posted 2000-09-02 07:07 PM


     Dear Cinderella
Do you need help? This dragon
    has nothing to do.

Great haiku ellie!! Hope to see more!  

Little Spyro T. Dragon


Watching the poets
Passions' guardian dragon
Moves with the rhymes' flow.

Though my body be
Human, my heart and soul be
That of a dragon.

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2000-09-02 08:06 PM


Ellie~
Nice Senryu ...

Cinderella, girl
That bowl doesn't have to be
Snow White ! !


~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com



BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919
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3 posted 2000-09-02 10:11 PM


Hahahahahaha Ellie, will remember this one when I grab that brush next time.  

But will Prince Charming
forget to put the seat down
on his china throne?

Bonnie

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
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4 posted 2000-09-03 07:15 AM



           sweet cinderella
      you're invited to the ball
          don't flush it away

                -vlraynes

ellie-
  i love this.  really cute...but that bowl
  is definitely not worth missing the ball
  over.  

  -vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet.
                -vlraynes
          

pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa
5 posted 2000-09-03 01:10 PM


my favorite poetess brings smiles today for me..so sorely needed..thanks..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
6 posted 2000-09-03 01:29 PM



Sometimes, I feel like my life is like this too, well written and witty  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams



deleeme
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
7 posted 2000-09-04 12:05 PM


Why can't Prince Charming
Be instead Mr. Clean, or
Mr. Tidy Bowl?

Then I'll leave him home
Busy cleaning up this mess-
And I'll have a Ball!

Are these fractured enough(also commercial!)?
                  David

WOW- another day of life-and here among friends!
Ain't God Grand!



kaile
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singapore
8 posted 2000-09-04 05:24 AM


LOL on this rewritten version....well, wont the fairytale Cinderella be cross to read this?

nice humour

Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
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Texas
9 posted 2000-09-04 09:57 PM


ellie, LOL!    Love it, made me grin big. marcy
Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.
10 posted 2000-09-05 06:42 AM


Ellie,
  Your creative talents never cease to amuse,....er,I mean amaze me, LOL
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)


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