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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand 
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Hmm.. can't seem to write poetry about 'happy things' ^^ Take My Heart Away Dream of a sin, Take away the heart from the matter. Open the eyes, Realisation. Don’t you want to know? Don’t you think, Maybe you hurt me? No, I guess not. Speak of the mind, Insane and tormented. Scream of the shadow, And don’t bring the sun. Don’t you ever think of me. Not a question, but an order. Don’t you have a heart?! You don’t have a heart. Just an observation. But I’d kiss you again.. And let you take my heart away. |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
yes, sad but true we always go back for more... nicely done, Lynne! bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
Yes, the heart - sometimes it has a "mind" of its own that our head can't control! Fine poem...  |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
The heart is a slave to love...it can be torment ...well said. Jon |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
*applauds* Very very honest and well written..  Someday I'm sure a happy thought will find it's way through your pen to be expressed.. The majority of my poetry is said to be haunting or disturbing, but lately I can't seem to write sad things anymore.. *thoughtfully* I'm not sure if that's good or bad, but I'm sure you'll find some inner peace that will help you with happier poetry... *wanders off before she makes even less sense then she already did...*  With a little piece of tomorrow, You'll have to kiss yesterday goodbye. Because today won't last forever, And the past will only make you cry. |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Hi Yu, Really good writing. This is so deep and sad, expressed very well. Sometimes the heart can not be taken away from the matter that easily, I hope they open their eyes soon, for your sake. Love, Marcy |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Hiya Lynne! First things first *supmegturbohuGGGzzzz* !!!! Really missed ya! Secondly, this is really great! I can imagine the scene... the emotions... *S* Definitely one of my favourites!! love, michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank you! Dan.. yeah.. ppl are masochists, mm? *_^ Thank you very much, Allan and Jon.. ^^ B.W.Angel.. ^^ hehe, naw, u waz making perfect sense! ^^ Yeah, hehe.. I hope so.. tho, it is good to be able to write both.. ^^ hehe, maybe i AM a masochist.. *_^ Marcy, well.. not actually written from personal experiences, hehe.. actually, i have no idea where this one came from.. Aww, thanx Midnightblues! Nice ta know I waz missed! ^_^ Mmm, I've been really busy.. I will try to come more often now.. but I have exams coming up soon.. (again.. =P) So I hafta study.. Love, Lynne |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Yu Lan, very fine poem about the condition of the human heart...soul-searching piece  |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanx kaile! ^^ Lots 'o love, -Lynne |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Sad but true what one's heart decides to do. Great job. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Lynne, A love poem, where did you get all the ideas from? hmm, not bad for a starter, actually it's really not that sad, sometimes we can find pleasure out of sheer sadness. [This message has been edited by jamesjiao (edited 09-03-2000).] |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanx Kevin.. ^^ James.. the idea? well.. I am not sure, lol.. of course I have never had experience with anything like that.. well.. is this really classified as a 'love poem'? I don't know.. I never seem to be able to write a poem about love that is actually 'in tact'.. or present rather than past.. oh well. ^_^ Mmm, I guess u r right.. ^^ -Thank u both.. -LC |
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