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Out of Season

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

0 posted 2000-08-28 11:04 PM

Out of Season

Raw heat sets the arid scene
as the blackwing searches greedily
foreshadowed fissures;
juiced skeletons into its claws burst.
Tumbleweeds drag to airless tunes,
the core trench of wastefullness
daring disjointed (poetic thoughts)
to drink.

Captive to shifting sands,
cactus greens fight dune tan
for position, mazing
to the vacuuming breeze,
erupting the masses.
Scraps of sky white and hell red
counterweave;
Snakeskin on bleached stone
lies choking on miles of myriad
color passes.

There is no foundation on which
to structure a sentence.

...chanson~

allan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 620
On the road

1 posted 2000-08-29 03:03 PM

Chanson - I liked your daring here, letting your ideas flow through different words formations and sense-impressions. It leaves a lasting impression in the mind. Keep writing and I'll keep reading!

allan

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

2 posted 2000-08-29 03:08 PM

Very complimentary you are, Allan.

Thank you.
Your words have warmed me

...chanson~

~"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley~

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere

3 posted 2000-08-30 07:38 AM

This made me think of Amarillo, Texas where I was born..

I don't know why, but that's what it brought to mind.. maybe it was the images of tumble weeds..very well written and I look forward to seeing more.

With a little piece of tomorrow,
You'll have to kiss yesterday goodbye.
Because today won't last forever,
And the past will only make you cry.

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

4 posted 2000-08-30 07:46 AM

Thank you, BWAngel!!!

...chanson~

~"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..." P.B. Shelley~

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