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Joannak
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0 posted 2000-08-28 01:32 PM



Gently falling rain
lightly moistening my hair,
eyes already wet.

jk


What better way to become immortal than to wake up each day and write? Ray Bradbury



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INclan
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1 posted 2000-08-28 01:45 PM


Joannak,

So sad soft and sweet.....

Dennis L. White
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2 posted 2000-08-28 02:44 PM


Joanna,
  Yes a sad one, yet richly descriptive!
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)


pegasus111
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3 posted 2000-08-28 02:48 PM


lovely..how about "Droplets" as a title?

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

Dark Angel
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4 posted 2000-08-28 06:02 PM


Joannak, this is lovely, soft, serene and sad.
I like Pegasus' suggestion for the title  

Well Done!  


Moon Dust
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5 posted 2000-08-28 06:07 PM


ah for some reason i only like to cry when it rains. Sad but bueatiful

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kaile
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6 posted 2000-09-01 12:35 PM


Joannak,i like the powerful ending that jolts this reader a little
Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-09-02 10:56 AM


Joanna~
I liked the image this evoked.

May I suggest 'Sprinkled' ...
~*Marge*~


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allan
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8 posted 2000-09-02 08:25 PM


'Liked this very much, soft and gentle feel...
Joannak
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9 posted 2000-09-03 06:23 PM


Thank you all for your comments.  In honor of both Pegasus and Marge, I submit for your approval.... Sprinkled Droplets ?

What better way to become immortal than to wake up each day and write? Ray Bradbury



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