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blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15
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Denver, CO

0 posted 2000-08-25 01:47 PM


I Cry

Not a single tear
Too many
Shed for you
I cry

You explain
All night long
Drowned by sorrow
I cry

Lost my only love
A fear, a battle
I can't win
I cry

For you, for me
For love
Gone too soon
I cry

Never there
Or always here
Half-empty or full
I cry

Too far gone
Or gone too far
Goodbye, love
I cry

No more hope
A small cut
Tears of blood
I cry

The end is near
You,...are far
Lost love
I cry

Fear tomorrow
Departed today
All is gone
I cry

I won't miss you
Because I had YOU
A short while, still
I cry


Alicia A. Renzelman

© Copyright 2000 Alicia R - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2000-08-25 09:05 PM


This is fabulous, Alicia! That's exactly what it feels like. Very good writing!

Denise

pegasus111
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2 posted 2000-08-26 01:02 AM


this is very good..like the repeating theme..looking forward to more, Alicia..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
3 posted 2000-08-26 06:47 PM


Alicia, Lovely poem; Good writing, but dry them tears up....hope your stay here makes you happy again.   Love, Marcy
Lakewalker
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4 posted 2000-08-26 08:28 PM


You've put this so well, great job on the poem.
I won't miss you
Because I had YOU
A short while, still
I cry

MMoonchild
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5 posted 2000-08-26 08:36 PM


the way you wrote each verse  I had to catch my breath...so the effect was great...
~~spft hugs
Maureen

Marge Tindal
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6 posted 2000-08-27 01:25 AM


Alicia~
Hope things cheer up a bit !

'Never there
Or always here
Half-empty or full
I cry'


~*Marge*~




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DawnG
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7 posted 2000-08-27 01:59 AM


Alicia,

A much needed reminder from a fellow pub friend. Hope you are able to dry your tears soon. You'll always have lots of friends here at the Pub.

                             Dawn

blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO
8 posted 2000-08-28 12:29 PM


Callie, thanks so much, I found one set of friends here once, though it seems they've all disappeared.  Hope to find the same in y'all.
Lakewalker, that is one of my favorite verses too, thanks.
Marge, I felt this expressed the sorrow I was feeling at the time, more pessimistic than optimistic.
Thank you all so very much!  I would be lost without your caring nature and the love you all show me!
Alicia

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