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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2000-08-23 08:20 AM




#2
Anticipation

Saree-clad woman
Flushed face, marked in vermilion -
Bride awaiting groom

#3
Preface To A Dream

Distant echoes sound
Lilting mystical music -
A nightmare begins

#4
A Shrink Speaks

Troubled and distressed
By dreary everyday chores ~
Exhale the air out

#5
Populous India

A billion men sight
New millennium dawning -
Crowded India



   ...fancy any one in particular?...thanks...  


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allan
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since 2000-04-09
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1 posted 2000-08-23 12:25 PM


I found these to be full of atmosphere, well done Sudhir.

(I particularly liked the last one!)  

Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17
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2 posted 2000-08-23 02:12 PM


Sudhir,
  Excellent collection of Senryu vignettes!
Dennis :^)
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Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)


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ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
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3 posted 2000-08-23 04:36 PM


Sudhir; Thank you for the "buffet" here in this pub. Nice to feast on the variations of food for the soul! You set out a lovely smorgasbord! Ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

BSC
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4 posted 2000-08-23 06:38 PM


You, kind sir, are on a roll!!!!  These are wonderful, simplicity packed full of fine images.  Bonnie
Alle'cram
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5 posted 2000-08-23 06:55 PM


All of these are very good. 2)bashful 3)fright 4)"familiar" 5)Distress
I loved the title too.   Marcy

juliet_2u
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since 2000-07-23
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6 posted 2000-08-23 08:44 PM


Sudhir these are excellent and you're soooooooo ahead of me now, hehe.
Juls

Sudhir Iyer
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7 posted 2000-08-24 08:22 AM


Thank You all, my very good friends... thank you for all your kindness...

regards,
sudhir
P.S. had to change a few for they did not match up to the 5-7-5 rule... now they should...  

Marge Tindal
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8 posted 2000-08-24 01:58 PM


Oh, Sudhir, my friend~
These are just wonderfully well-done.
You are really improving your style.

How versatile is your talent ! !
Enjoying your progress very much.
~*Marge*~


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sweetcollege_girl
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9 posted 2000-08-24 02:07 PM


ditto everyone! I would say it, but why? It is all in the replies! Great work Sudhir!

stay cool

~~Lavada~~



"For every beauty, there is an eye somewhere to see it.
For every truth, there is an ear somewhere to hear it
For every love, there is a heart some

Sudhir Iyer
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
10 posted 2000-08-25 10:11 AM


Hey Marge, my friend, thanks for all the guidance so far with the haiku/senryu styles...  a friend and a mentor, you are...

Sweet Lavada, Thanks a million for your lovely response...

regards to all,
sudhir

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