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MaryArlet
Junior Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 15
Phoenix, Arizona, USA

0 posted 2000-08-07 01:46 AM


reality wins
tears now fill my empty soul
alone once again


© Copyright 2000 Mary Arlet - All Rights Reserved
jamesjiao
Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268
Backwaters of Avalon
1 posted 2000-08-07 03:56 AM


Wow!

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.



Dennis L. White
Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.
2 posted 2000-08-07 06:55 AM


Mary,
  This is excellent! I hope it is just the first of MANY! Welcome to the Corner Pub, Please sit down and tell us more! Great first post!
Dennis :^)< !signature-->

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)


[This message has been edited by Dennis L. White (edited 08-07-2000).]

ellie LeJeune
Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
3 posted 2000-08-07 07:37 AM


Welcome to the Corner Pub, Mary. This is a beautifully sad piece. Well done too! I'm
looking forward to more of your poetry here.
ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

allan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620
On the road
4 posted 2000-08-07 02:29 PM


I agree with ellie, beautifully sad. Lots of levels of meaning in there, very well done!  
DawnG
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494
United States
5 posted 2000-08-07 03:12 PM


Welcome to the Pub. I'm sure you'll love it here. I know I do. Great first piece.

                           Dawn

MaryArlet
Junior Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 15
Phoenix, Arizona, USA
6 posted 2000-08-07 05:56 PM


Thanks for all of the wonderful replies!!
They mean alot to me!

Honeybee
Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
7 posted 2000-08-07 06:44 PM



Welcome to passions!  You made quite the entrance with this senryu, a bittersweet read, well written and expressed. You have the talent for haikus and senryus so do share more!  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly


vlraynes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
8 posted 2000-08-07 08:42 PM



Mary-
  You KNOW I like this one.  
  Welcome to the pub, my friend.

  love ya,
      vicky

"I have read your words, and within
them I have found your heart.
               -vlraynes

kaile
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Ascendant
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146
singapore
9 posted 2000-08-11 05:19 AM


and a very good one...welcome to passions!!
Wikket
Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 340
Santa Clara, CA USA
10 posted 2000-08-11 08:32 AM


So few words, yet they tear into me like talons into frightened prey!  Welcome to the Corner Pub!  I await more!  ~~Jamie     
Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
11 posted 2000-08-11 10:15 AM


Welcome to Passions and The Corner Pub!  I can't wait to see more of your work if it's all as great as this
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