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Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
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0 posted 2000-08-01 02:30 AM


Said With Affection

He laughs,
His words ringing in my ears.
Pointing out my every fault,
Every second that I live;
I hear his words
Chase me down the street.
And he laughs.
I smile, as the tears well,
Building up inside my soul,
Until,
When I am alone,
They follow a worn pathway,
Coursing down my cheeks.
And he laughs.
He doesn’t see;
No-one sees,
For I hide behind my smile.
He thinks its all a game,
But I can’t tell him how I feel;
He holds me in his web,
For all my resentment
Melts away at the kind words,
That he throws in my direction,
Every once, blue moon.
As I forgive him,
The taunts start again,
One too many, two too many,
Leave un-healing scars,
To rot in my being,
As I weep from,
One too many, two too many,
Cruel words,
Said with affection.

...........




Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu

(Please e-mail me at yu_lan_wen_@hotmail.com instead of the e-

© Copyright 2000 Lynne Miura, née Chudley - All Rights Reserved
vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
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Somewhere... out there...
1 posted 2000-08-01 03:51 AM



Lynne-
  This is wonderful - very well written.
  The feelings run very deep with this.
    "...for I hide behind my smile..."
  Oh, how many times I've been there.
  Thanks for sharing this.

  -vicky

"I have read your words, and within
them I have found your heart.
  -vlraynes

midnightblues
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2 posted 2000-08-01 03:52 AM


U've said it all, Lynne...sometimes we juz hate ourselves for loving somebody.....


love, michelle


If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

Denise
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3 posted 2000-08-01 10:18 PM


Well written, Lynne. Very true for many people, I'm sure. I wish they would realize that they don't have to put up with being spoken to like that. Real love doesn't 'talk' that way.

Denise

Yu Lan
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4 posted 2000-08-02 01:49 AM


Yeah.. ^_^ Thank you all.. ^_^ Just want u to know though, this WAS written about someone I love, but not a 'partner' as such.. more.. my father..

Luv,

Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu

(Please e-mail me at yu_lan_wen_@hotmail.com instead of the e-

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
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5 posted 2000-08-02 02:06 AM



lynne-
  Just had to tell you that you did
  a good job of leading the reader's
  mind in the right direction on this.
  The first time I read it, I felt that
  it was written for a parental figure,
  and more specifically, your father.
  Truely love this one.  

  -vicky

"I have read your words, and within
them I have found your heart.
            -vlraynes

midnightblues
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6 posted 2000-08-02 06:51 AM


oops Lynne sorry misinterpreted, i guess we can't hate ourselves for loving our dads!!!


love, michelle


If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

Little_Spyro
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since 2000-01-09
Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA
7 posted 2000-08-02 09:32 AM


Well, I never would have guessed--I'm glad I got the subject in one of the replies before having to guess...

And this is one wonderful piece you've got here, Lynne! Fantastic job!!  


Little Spyro T. Dragon

Yu Lan
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8 posted 2000-08-05 01:32 AM


Thanx Vicky! ^_^ Well i am glad that that's what this piece portrayed.. ^_^

Michelle.. tha's ok! ^_^ No, u r right.. I can't.. ^_^

Spyro.. well, thank you very much, sir! *_^ glad ya liked it Spyro...

Luv y'all..




Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu

(Please e-mail me at yu_lan_wen_@hotmail.com instead of the e-

Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
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Texas
9 posted 2000-08-05 03:46 PM


Yu, I know "exactly" what you mean! Your style inherited? Forgive my candor.

"One too many, two too many,
Cruel words,"

Yu Lan
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10 posted 2000-08-06 06:18 AM


^_^
Mmm, hehe. well, don't know that I need to forgive your candour, as I am not sure I understand what you mean there.. inherited?

Luv,
Lynne

Alle'cram
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11 posted 2000-08-06 11:14 AM


Hi!
  Read your e, 'plained it all!
Great read, btw.

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
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ireland
12 posted 2000-08-06 04:31 PM


Lynne, a lovely poem. really enjoyed reading this.

"To the centre of the
city where all roads
meet, waiting for you,To the depths of the ocean where all hopes sank,
searching for you," Joy divison

DawnG
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13 posted 2000-08-06 10:52 PM


oh I've been there many a time.. Great piece and a reminder I desperately needed tonight.

                              Dawn

DawnG
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14 posted 2000-08-06 10:52 PM


oh I've been there many a time.. Great piece and a reminder I desperately needed tonight.

                              Dawn

serenity blaze
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15 posted 2000-08-07 12:47 PM


and that is so confusing...I am becoming quite a fan of yours, always thoughtful work Yu Lan...applauding.
jamesjiao
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Backwaters of Avalon
16 posted 2000-08-07 03:39 AM


Lynne,

this is a good piece, nice feeling. i really like it.. keep on with your prose style, i am always your fan.



- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.



Yu Lan
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Posts 1462
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17 posted 2000-08-11 04:21 AM


Thanx Brian.. ^_^
Callie, I'm glad u enjoyed this.. thank you.. ^_^
Serenity.. A fan!! ^_^ Hehe, thank you serenity.. well I must say, I thoroughly enjoy reading all of your work too.. quite an exceptional poet u r.. *_^
James.. thanx.. ^_^ gosh.. 2 fans, hehe.. I shall get cold.. *_^

Thank u everyone!! ^_^

Love,
Lynne

dgvarner
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18 posted 2000-08-13 02:25 PM


"As I forgive him,
The taunts start again,
One too many, two too many,
Leave un-healing scars,
To rot in my being,
As I weep from,
One too many, two too many,
Cruel words,
Said with affection."

hmm..yeah..the ones we love the most will be the ones who hurt us the most..because we love them...they dont always seem to realize they are causing hurtfulness..

youve done a wonderful job portraying the ache caused by careless words...

dg



"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran


Yu Lan
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19 posted 2000-08-14 01:54 AM


Thanx dg.. yeah, that's just right..
if someone can hurt you, it means you care about them.. the more you care, the easier it is for them to hurt you..
thanks for reading this.. ^_^

Love,
Lynne

kaile
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20 posted 2000-08-18 09:39 PM


Yu Lan, this flows so beautifully and i dig the mature sentiments that radiate out from this gem....very nice...you have expressed some deeply-felt-but-hard-to-put-on-paper emotions very well indeed

keep writing

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
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21 posted 2000-08-19 08:36 PM


Wow.  This is amazing, I really felt this poem.  Thank you for sharing it with us   
Alle'cram
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22 posted 2000-08-19 09:25 PM


Hi Lynne,
  So glad this one came back around. You already know I think your writing is excellent! ...and only sixteen! Wow, you have expressed your feelings so well through this poem. Keep it up....sorry,Lu could not delete above...well, let it serve as a reminder, when communication gets scrambled, keep talking...get it worked out. You are precious! Marcy

Yu Lan
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Posts 1462
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23 posted 2000-08-23 05:50 AM


Thanks kaile.. ^^ a gem.. aw, u r sweet.. *_^

lakewalker; tha's ok, thank U, for reading it! ^_^

Thanx Marcy.. I'm glad u like this.. (15years..    ) hey, and I'd already forgotten.. *_^ thank you Marcy.. aww, ain't u an angel.. ^^

Love,
Lynne

jamesjiao
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Backwaters of Avalon
24 posted 2000-09-03 07:23 PM


Oh, ok thank you everyone. (
Yu Lan
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New Zealand
25 posted 2000-09-04 01:56 AM


Umm.. what???
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