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vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...


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a deadly silence
   pierces the atmosphere
as a jagged sword
   cutting mercilessly
      at my heart
my aching soul
   cries out
as my heart
   is ripped away
leaving only
    a vacant space
a flood rushes in
   to fill the void
the waters rise
   and soon will erupt
in a volcano
   of hot lava tears
when the smoke clears
   I will be left-
a shattered soul
   weeping
      among the cinders

        -vlraynes


"...until you have read the
verse on his heart, you have
not truely met the poet.
        -vlraynes
      

© Copyright 2000 Vicky L. Raynes - All Rights Reserved
midnightblues
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1 posted 08-01-2000 03:48 AM       View Profile for midnightblues   Email midnightblues   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit midnightblues's Home Page   View IP for midnightblues

vicky, u paint the picture of heartache here exquisitely...definitely heart-wrenching dear! *S*


love, michelle


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vlraynes
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Michelle-
  Thanks so much.  I always
  appreciate your comments.  

  -vicky

"...until you have read the
verse on his heart, you have
not truely met the poet.
     -vlraynes
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Your words ring very sharp and true, I could feel each,as I relive my own shattered moments through your words.

Lady Nogs
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You describe it well. Excellent writing!  

Denise
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Lady Nogs-
  Thanks for your response.  I have
  definitely had my share of 'shattered
  moments'.  Glad you liked this.  

  -vicky

"...until you have read the words on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet.
  -vlraynes
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Denise-
  Thank you so much for the compliment.  
  Really glad you enjoyed this.

  -vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet.
  -vlraynes
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I liked it too, Vicky!  

Denise
dgvarner
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yes..i remember these moments of impending "hot lava tears..." yours, mine..ours, theirs..
well written tricks!  

"a shattered soul
   weeping
      among the cinders"


lv,dg...




"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran

vlraynes
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Denise-
   Thanks again!  
   Really glad you enjoyed this.  
  
   -vicky  

dg-
   Oh yes, far too many 'hot lava tears'
   have been shed.  Fortunately, there
   have also been good friends to
   share them with.  
   Thanks for reading and enjoying.
   Thanks for, "well written, tricks".  
   Your compliments mean a lot.

   -tricks  

"...until you have read the verse on
his heart, you have not truely met
the poet.
              -vlraynes
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