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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida 
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raw sadness quakes my soul. something inside crashes, breaking as glass, to cut my internal being. i bleed... wet prisms soak my eyes and sting. they fall from my face; clearly the blood of my body-- leaving me a hollow shell to call my own. my heart echoes in the emptiness-- beating viciously for the piece that was stripped away... the internal ache shuffles through the darkness to find its light-- only to find, the stream at its feet is red; there is no morning... -dgvarner "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dg- WOW! This one is raally good! I love it!!! I really feel this. Oh, and did I mention, WOW!!!  love ya muchly, tricks "I have read your words, and within them I have found your heart. -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
U conveyed these feelins really well, dg! The hollowness, the stabs of pains... Great one dg! *huGz* love, michelle If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
tricks: didnt want you to think i was gettin' soft and writin' happy stuff  heehee... this is one of those, "ouch! it wont stop hurting!!" things..the poem usually sifts the poison from my system, but this time took a little longer to go away....  midnight: the stabs of pain...yep..glad i could convey it well..thanks for reading and replying!! dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
ah, the depths of soul pain that causes such anguish . . . well written, one can see the flow of beating crimson with each word. Lady Nogs |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
thanks lady i wrote this for my brother, with whom i have a very close relationship..when it hurt, it hurt real bad... your response is much appreciated dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
oh this really hurts.....the pain is so intense... youve expressed your anguish very well... enjoyed the poem (but hope things are well for you) ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Wow! I loved it. "wet prisims soak my eyes and sting" (my favorite line there) Joy Gather ye rosebuds while ye may, Old time is still a-flying, And this same flower that smiles today To-morrow will be dying. -Robert Herrick |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
my heart echoes in the emptiness-- beating viciously for the piece that was stripped away... Wow, this one really gets your emotions going, good job! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
pout, joy, lakewalker: thanks so much for reading! i really appreciate your responses  dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This caputures the very essence of anguish. Very well written. Denise |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dee, that's what I meant, the way you have with words is so amazing.  |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
denise: glad you stopped to read me--your responses are much appreciated marsha: my own private applause section! glad to hear from you again! thank you for your comments dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
I'm going to cry! no, not really, but this is so beautifully terrible, dg.. I hope u r feeling better now, because the way you described that deeling, made it sound, unbearable..Love, Lynne |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
yu lan: hmm..unbearable it was..but it was a good while back--and bro and i are back on track thanks for reading! dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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