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Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
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Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 2000-07-26 11:54 PM


Precious Bambi

There he was
in the yard
as beautiful
as can be,
I elevated
the older child
up to see the view,
then sat her
on the counter
so I could elevate
the younger child
and hold him
as we just took in
the beauty.
Not truly where
he belonged
yet in reality
he belonged
so much more
I do believe
as he ate
from the fruit
of the trees.

Something scared him
and he pranced away
towards the front yard.
We ran to the front door
sprung it open wide
as we see him standing
off to the side in all his beauty.

At one moment he turned
and looked at us
and I melted
at the sweetness of his freedom.
Then he slowly walked
to the street and crossed
with such grace,
and we could see
his past wound very evident,
knowing humanity
took a swipe at him.
We went to the picture window
and watched him
as he wandered lost
in a universe that was theirs
until progress took it all away.

The innocence
of the children
just reveled
in the beauty
of this creature
so free,
yet a prisoner
in it's own
environment.
This creature
was a precious Bambi
that's at least
what the children
called him,
and who am I
to argue with a child.



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kelieth
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since 2000-06-12
Posts 314
Normal IL - USA
1 posted 2000-07-27 02:05 AM


A prettier picture can not be found.  The heart felt words here are abound.  The feeling in my heart is one of simple awe.  Great work A sight to cherish for all.  

Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."

kaile
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singapore
2 posted 2000-07-27 04:19 AM


i like the way you incorporate such an important issue about our domination in such a beauty-packed poem well done
Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

3 posted 2000-07-27 04:48 AM


This is rather wonderful and slightly lamenting...just like life,you've captured it well LD.


Jon

Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
4 posted 2000-07-27 05:29 AM


A precious moment captured in a beautiful poem to be placed out of time and preserved forever. So lovely.  
ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
5 posted 2000-07-27 07:55 AM


What a precious moment you have preserved here with your children. A moment you captured with eloquence and beauty, and sadly, truth. ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL

BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919
New York, USA
6 posted 2000-07-27 10:26 AM


Oh LD, you've captured such a precious moment with your children, and the realities of this world so well in this beautifully written poem.  Bonnie
Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.
7 posted 2000-07-27 11:29 AM


Ria,
  A thing of beauty you have witnessed and shared with these children, and yes it is sad that this beauty is endangered by mans so called progress and the toughtless society we are a part of. Well written and thought provoking piece.
Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
8 posted 2000-07-27 06:59 PM


Hey Lost Dreamer... What a great experience for you and your children... A good touch of contrast in your thoughts... to bad as adults we just can't see the Bambi of childhood.  Peace to you and yours.
Denise
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9 posted 2000-07-27 09:06 PM


Very beautifull done, Gloria! I love it!

Denise

Lady Lost
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since 2000-07-13
Posts 470

10 posted 2000-07-28 08:44 AM


I still can't watch Bambi without crying..this is a beautiful poem!  ...beth

You can never have too much fiction; reality can be such a bore

Brenda Hall
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since 2000-05-30
Posts 88
Texas,USA
11 posted 2000-07-29 08:22 AM


A beautifully shared moment!

GBU!
Brenda Hall

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
12 posted 2000-07-29 08:25 AM


The innocence
of the children
just reveled
in the beauty
of this creature
so free,
yet a prisoner
in it's own
environment.
This creature
was a precious Bambi
that's at least
what the children
called him,
and who am I
to argue with a child.

beautiful image, lovely poem.



"A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun

midnightblues
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597
Singapore
13 posted 2000-07-30 07:11 AM


Wow what a delightful activity, LostDreamer! Another of ur heart-warming pieces, I LOVE IT! *S*


love, michelle


If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

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