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A Candle Snubbed

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StarrGazer
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0 posted 07-25-2000 11:45 PM       View Profile for StarrGazer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for StarrGazer


Candles flickering
Flames dancing in the wind
Just a reflection
Of the fire burning within
Hot wax dripping
Puddling on the table
Like words I try to speak
But am not able
You blow the candle out
I watch the smoke stream
Wondering if you realize
You just extinguished my dream
I scrape the wax from the table, throw it away
Now thankful for the words I couldn't seem to say
I put the candle in a drawer and close it tight
I've learned the words will come when the time is right
Hopefully next time I light the candle it will forever burn
With the eternal kind of love, for which I yearn
© Copyright 2000 Shan Crider - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 07-26-2000 01:33 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

StarrGazer~
This is wistfully lovely.
A sorrowing thought -
so well done.
~*Marge*~


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kelieth
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2 posted 07-26-2000 01:55 AM       View Profile for kelieth   Email kelieth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit kelieth's Home Page   View IP for kelieth

Stargazer,
     Such a romantic piece I hope you find the love you seek.

Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."
midnightblues
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3 posted 07-26-2000 02:35 AM       View Profile for midnightblues   Email midnightblues   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit midnightblues's Home Page   View IP for midnightblues

The is so delightful, StarrGazer! Sounds to me like a surreal and beautiful melody.....

You blow the candle out
I watch the smoke stream
Wondering if you realize
You just extinguished my dream

This is so sad! =(

love, michelle


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childomine
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4 posted 07-26-2000 07:13 AM       View Profile for childomine   Email childomine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for childomine

Wow!!!  This is excellent!  


"Hot wax dripping
puddling on the table
Like words I try to speak
but am not able."

Beautiful, sad and deeply touching.
StarrGazer
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5 posted 07-26-2000 07:41 AM       View Profile for StarrGazer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for StarrGazer

Thanks Marge, kelieth, midnightblues,childomine
ellie LeJeune
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6 posted 07-26-2000 07:53 AM       View Profile for ellie LeJeune   Email ellie LeJeune   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ellie LeJeune

WOW! Beautiful and so romantic. A poetic delight!  ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL
Jon Mewett
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7 posted 07-26-2000 09:09 AM       View Profile for Jon Mewett   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jon Mewett

I agree here ,this is very romantic and so very sad,but love can be like that.

I hope your candle bursts back into flame soon.

Jon
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8 posted 07-26-2000 06:12 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

StarrGazer, wonderfully written, beautiful images. I hope you find your eternal flame.

"A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun
Denise
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9 posted 07-27-2000 09:03 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very beautifully done, Starrgazer!

Denise
Erin
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10 posted 07-28-2000 01:11 PM       View Profile for Erin   Email Erin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Erin

this is a beautiful poem. i hope that one day soon your candlke will be re-lit and your wishes and dreams come true.

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~
Brenda Hall
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11 posted 07-28-2000 11:01 PM       View Profile for Brenda Hall   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brenda Hall

Hi! Starrgazer!

Your poem is very heart warming! I have had those same candles lit,but they still lay in the drawer..unlit!

Good Luck!
Brenda Hall
StarrGazer
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12 posted 07-29-2000 12:58 AM       View Profile for StarrGazer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for StarrGazer

Thanks ellie, Jon, Brian, Denise, Erin, Brenda  

Brenda I think the longer it takes to get the candle lit again and the slower it burns the better it is??? Can't gaurantee that  but seems to be proving true  
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13 posted 12-25-2004 11:50 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

so sadly beautiful
 
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