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Fallen Star (Brian's Challenge)

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Justbleu
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0 posted 07-17-2000 01:40 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Through the years
I've wished to be
A grown up inside
This world I see
I've had my days
Of joyful glee
Turned upside down
Writhed inside of me
Stars have their moment
And then they die
At work I glowed
Blinding the light
Friends did abound
All came knocking
And running through
Straight in the door
In school passing tests
Radiating all the way
Going along at a happy speed
Skipping along at good beat
A groove in my dreams
With a bounce in my step
Smile across my face
My heart pounding
At wonderous things
One sudden day
All falling quite into place
There I saw you in my space
A joyous day I will never forget
My angel sparkling bright
Oh what smiles and such charm
Gently moving right to me
Lost in such total awe of you
While we stood there together
You simply completed me



"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown




[This message has been edited by Justbleu (edited 07-17-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Bridgette C. Morgan Schroeder - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 07-17-2000 02:22 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Justbleu,

WOW!!!
what a poem... surpassed the challenge very efficiently ...

great flow... and I did read it all in a single breath....

regards, sudhir
ellie LeJeune
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2 posted 07-17-2000 05:43 PM       View Profile for ellie LeJeune   Email ellie LeJeune   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ellie LeJeune

" you simply completed me" Lovely and so romantic. ellie

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

eL
brian madden
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3 posted 07-17-2000 06:21 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Justbleu, beautifully written thanks for taking the challenge and as Sudhir say you well exceeded the brief. wonderful poem.

"Out of sorrow entire worlds have been built
Out of longing great wonders have been willed
They're only little tears, darling, let them spill" Nick
Denise
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4 posted 07-17-2000 08:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very beautiful, Bridgette! Challenge well met!

Denise
midnightblues
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5 posted 07-18-2000 07:10 AM       View Profile for midnightblues   Email midnightblues   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit midnightblues's Home Page   View IP for midnightblues

Very pretty Justbleu! Lightheart yet in-depth. *S* I LOVE IT!

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™
Lost Dreamer
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6 posted 07-22-2000 08:54 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Justbleu, This is fabulous, I enjoyed it very much, and the ending is perfect.
Justbleu
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7 posted 07-23-2000 12:25 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Thanks everyone!!!!  I enjoyed the challenge...it was a lot of fun to see what I could do with the lines!!  I also enjoyed reading the other poems for the challenge tha I've read!!!
Thank You all again!!
Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown
kaile
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8 posted 07-23-2000 06:37 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

love the ending..reminds me of Jerry Maguire the movie where Tom Cruise touched Renee's heart by saying the exact line

thanx for the read and the meomory
kelieth
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9 posted 07-25-2000 02:19 AM       View Profile for kelieth   Email kelieth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit kelieth's Home Page   View IP for kelieth

Very beautiful and enjoyable.  

Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."
Justbleu
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10 posted 07-25-2000 02:25 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Kaile...it is very close but the exact line was "You Complete Me"!!  Thank You...I am glad you liked it!!!!
Thank You again Kevin...glad you enjoyed it!!
Bridgette  

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown
passing shadows
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awww...beautiful
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