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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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NEVER ENDING LOVE Puttering about the house this morn a honey do here and a honey do there. Found a worn out, chewed up, old piece of suede leather. My son's dog knew it before I did he danced; singing in circles, "Don't you remember?" first the memories, then awe, tears, finally love. Carefully folding the tattered leather putting my fingers through the holes smelling the boy and his left behind dog. Seemed there were tears in the dogs eyes as he looked up to me for answers answers I, in turn, look to Heaven to dispense. My son's dog and I found their toy this morn oh how they loved to play tug, hide and seek, and chase my son's dog would growl and growl, my son would laugh. Oh, God in Heaven, how I miss his laugh I laid the leather in the bed of my son's dog with his cardboard and old blankets, now there is comfort. My son's dog can sleep with my son once again thank you God for love, love that keeps us going love that my son's dog holds in his heart. Thank you, dear Father, for that leather for Your sweet, sweet, never ending love Your love that knows the loss of a Son... 1/96 bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
This was my first posted piece here in the forums. I rewrote it to submit to another magazine and thought i would share it here. Perhaps it should have went in another forum...i donna know. What do y'all think? Is the rewrite effective? thanks in advance for your help, friends! bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Effective? I think it's a very moving piece brought me to tears. I don't do that often. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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toes21 Junior Member
since 2000-07-09
Posts 24 |
Just wanted you to know, that I enjoyed reading your poem. |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
I can relate to this, when you lose a child we look for even the slighted trace or scent of the footsteps that child left on earth. Peace to you..my friend. [This message has been edited by Septsong (edited 07-10-2000).] |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
I too have lost a child and my heart is one with yours in the pain. This poem was so beautiful and also moved me greatly.Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. ell |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Well, you definitly have my vote! You should read the poem 'Sacrifice' which is basically the same thing...  . A tear-jerker though...--the little one |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
this is amazing;y written Daniel.. I haven't read the original one, but any alterations you made, to get THIS as the result, have to be commended.. and emotional, beautiful poem in memory of a painful experience.. Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Truely heart-rending...Yet peace seems to prevail still.u haf my vote! If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
thank you each for your encouragement, it is warmly received and appreciated! This piece is difficult to read, i agree it was much more difficult to live... my heart goes out to those who have lived it i pray for your comfort. Daniel...aka: bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Daniel~ This is as close to tender pefections of the heart as you can get. I feel the pain ... but even more keenly ... I feel the love. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've expressed your heart well in this Daniel. How wonderful that you can still find treasures amidst the sorrow, 'tis amazing how someone up above knows just when to send us a little gift of remembrance and love. I was touched by this lovely poem.  Best wishes and prayers, /Kit |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is simply wonderful construction of a poem..your departed son, his dog, the toy that used to play together with....amazing work, sir. I am very sorry for your loss. This is one of the best poems I wish had never had to be written. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Bleeding, A friend e-mailed me about this poem she had found today in the corner pub, I did not know what to expect, but upon reading it I should of known it would have to do with love, and you have expressed it so exquisitly here, this poem has left a profound affect on me and im sure the world will love it as well, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very effective, Daniel. This had a more profound impact on me than the first time. I'm very sorry for your loss...every parent's nightmare. Denise |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Daniel, too many of us know what you have gone through...that you were able to put it to words is a testament to your belief in the Lord... and I thank you for that... no matter where you were to ever put this poem, its truth would ring out... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Well it made me cry but the sort that has a smile attached as well...bless you HUGS |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
i am humbled and thankfull for all the response that has poured out... Niether of us can re-read this with tears, and my poor wife loves/hates the new re-write because it strikes so deeply. Thank you all again Daniel...aka: bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Daniel--I am touched by this poem! I know the pain you feel from this little reminder and your dog's sweet memory of his friend. My heart goes out to you and your family for your loss...and thankyou for sharing this poem from your heart! |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is an incredible poem! You put heartbreak on the page with such a tender touch. Beautifully and poignantly done. I am a bereaved parent too, and so very sorry for your loss. The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
Daniel, I am sorry for your pain and loss. My memories of losing my sweet nephew are almost exactly written in your poem. Hugs to you and your wife. Gossamerwings ;) |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
thank you each for your support, concern and prayers. they say time heals all... sometimes it feels like a lie, eh? bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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