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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Time slips so effortless away……trailing to unconscienceness I have to struggle to stay in light. The steady beat of music notes becomes tangled sound bites mimicking the low hum of silence then there it is nothing there… detachment, hunched in my chair flickering dazed eyes burn upon screen radiation soaking in the stew of fuzzed images. This is a strange collage. I am just nestling I will live tomorrow not a defeatist mantra just the spiritual flow drifting aimlessly biding my seconds and murdering minutes in redundancy. The waters temperament is humid, It drains me I am deflating upon rivers of suggestion. I have to escape seize the day…seize the life each day as if it were the last, if it were would it change a thing? Nothing, I am scrambling in my final efforts a ball of fury, struck ineffective on its last spin It is a quarter past…some hour …time for action progression decision motion OR regression ease my tendons from the damages of fight constrain energy to a clinical death… scrapping the walls, pounding the doors burning golden carbohydrates…perspiring in vain resistance. Prising feebly upon the latch the key is gone the door remains locked. ========================================= "Life is wearing me thin I feel so drained, my legacy A sea of faces just like me and Life is wearing me thin I feel so drained, my legacy A sea of faces just like me I've been drained, emotion is a bitter fate Won't be here so I don't care I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt Won't be here so I don't care Prove my worth to people who I called my friends Won't be here so I don't care" Paul Draper- Mansun [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-08-2000).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Brian, Brian, Brian, how do you always do this, I just don't know how to respond to your poems. They send me into another sphere, like drifting in amazement, away in words colored and flying on there own catching other words along the way and inflating them with wisdom. All I can say is I wonder what happens when you find the keys, I wonder where you will take me then? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
dang Bri...when you said you are bored.. you weren't kidding  you take mundane and melancholy to new depths here... a portrait in complacentcy.. as for those keys... me thinks they are already in your hand... your poets pen my friend... it will take you anywhere you want to go the poem is awesome by the way... >Time slips so effortless away……trailing to unconscienceness I have to struggle to stay in light. The steady beat of music notes becomes tangled sound bites mimicking the low hum of silence then there it is nothing there… detachment, hunched in my chair flickering dazed eyes burn upon screen radiation soaking in the stew of fuzzed images. This is a strange collage. I am just nestling I will live tomorrow not a defeatist mantra just the spiritual flow drifting aimlessly biding my seconds and murdering minutes in redundancy. <<< (VERY COOL) ------------------ I know what the REAL problem is here... ya need to TURN UP THE MUSIC ...LOUDER when the fillings rattle out of your teeth.. turn it up more later-Bri-gator eve-gator |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Your poem astounds me ..... inspiring.....yet abit familiar( the emotions ) ... You seem to understand human emotions really well! *S* Great!! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
LD, when i find the keys I am heading On the Road. Thank you for beautiful words they are sunshine in this grey sky. Jan, looking in my hand, oh silly me you are right I was holding them all along. What would i do without you? About turning the music up loud, it was radiohead so I would sad no matter what, maybe i should put on some Spice girls (now that is music to slit your wrists to) LOL. anyway thank you for your sweet response, my sadness is gone see...  midnightblues, twice the praise? or is it an echo. Thank you for your wonderful comments. "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Your writing is phenominal, Brian. Well done! Denise |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
dsnyder, i am blushing and tripping over my inflated ego at the same time. LOL. thank you for your wonderful response. "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
And you possess a delightful sense of humor as well! Denise |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
brian..you amaze me..the way you put words together is just..well, amazing! i kind of feel like Lost Dreamer, in that, i want very much to respond to your poems..they move me..but i sit in awe and just dont know what to say!! youre a wonderful writer! love this.. dg "i speak in written word--my lips, no sound may utter..." dgvarner |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Brian- I have to say, 'ditto', to what dgvarner said. You are truely amazing! Your poetry touches me in such a way, that I'm not quite sure what to say; yet I feel the need to respond. I too am in awe. -vlraynes (vicky) "I have read your words, and within them I have found your heart. -vlraynes |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
dgvarner, thank you for your wonderful comments. vicky, thank you for your kind words and wonderful reply. "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Wow nothing I say could give this work justice. Great job. Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
i think we all see a bit of ourselves in the poem (which is fantastic as per usual)...and after reading Janet Marie's reply, i decided to take a look and open my own hand..to see if my keys have been there all along too! and when i find my way out of my own door, i'll give you a friendly *wave*! this piece of yours is just plain brilliant! |
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Stotty Junior Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 29 |
Brian, Yet again another extraordinary poem. Well constructed, and put together. My favourite part is when you say "Emotion is a bitter fate", it's very true. You really are a tremendous poet Brian, plus you are Irish - another advantage in my opinion! Keep writing! -Michelle. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Kevin, wow thanks for your generous words. thank you. pout, thanks for your wonderful reply and for the wave. If i had known you were in the next room waiting to wave to me I would not have been so down. Thanks. Michelle, I had to laugh when you chose your favourite part because from "Life is wearing me thin...." on are not my words. THey are actually song lyrics from a brilliant band called Mansun (english. It is not Marilyn Manson). I included the lyrics because they perfectly refelcted the mood of the poem. THanks for your very generous and extremely kind words. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Stotty Junior Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 29 |
Brian, Aaah I get it now, you include certain song lyrics at the end of your poems! I'm sorry, I feel rather stupid now. I'm new to this poetry board thing, please forgive me...at least I made you laugh!!! From a foolish Michelle. |
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