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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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tumble-weed wind blew in a tumble-weed today wonder the tales he could share? how many miles of breeze that weed been forced to bear? dusty and dry to the bone a tumbling on down the road. must have rolled a thousand miles betcha, maybe... many a load. a piece gone off the side car must have clipped him there. little ragged and semi-crushed rolling along with narry a care. wind blew in a tumble-weed today name forgotten, you understand? just another tramp off the road bettcha, maybe...once a man. 10/95 bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
This is great...i LOVE it!! i like the way you wrap things up at the end......excellent writing..i'm ipressed =] swamp And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Down-to-earth and brilliant. Your literature never fails to intrigue me! Vote!!! Looking forward to more of your posts. *S* If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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chibi_dragon Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 58 |
Kind of unusual but otherwise pretty good...keep up the good work!!   --Chibi |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Maybe we oughta just call ya Tumbles instead of Danimal eh? J/K I really love the spirit of this. Brings back some pretty fond memories. Love ya...Sis Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great writing as always, Daniel! Denise |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Aah, well done Daniel.. love that last verse.. it sets a wonderful scene.. "wind blew in a tumble-weed today name forgotten, you understand? just another tramp off the road bettcha, maybe...once a man." Aw, that poor old tramp.. *_^ nice writing.. gotta love that style.. Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
ditto the others' comments..love the way you set your poem in the beginning with the mention of the tumble-weed...kinda of the way a bedtime story might be started  the ending was marvellous...this reader caught his breath a bit when he read about the tramp enjoyable read |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
once again thanks for the comments. lol yes this one was interesting donna know why i am so enamered with bums, winos, prostitutes and tramps...maybe cause i've been a scooter tramp most o my life. Nah, even in school i was defending the underdogs...guess i'm just am a sucker for justice. Daniel...aka: bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
I love the easy breeze that blows the carefree tumbleweeds into our lives. Wonderfully done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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