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midnightblues
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since 2000-07-01
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Singapore

0 posted 2000-07-08 01:13 AM



When he walked out
A storm was brewing up
Dusky and engulfing the sky
Yet she felt so divine

She doesn’t want to stop there
She still wants a man

Second walk-out
This time she’s sad
Telling herself, love’s like that
Still she wishes for another romance

Come again
Storm and rain
Teach her a lesson
For loving in vain


If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

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Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.
1 posted 2000-07-08 01:24 AM


Midnightblues,
  You say you want a suggestion fo a title,
how 'bout "STORMY WEATHER"? Just a thought!
Dennis :^)



Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)

midnightblues
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Posts 1597
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2 posted 2000-07-08 01:28 AM


Geee Dennis that was nice *S* Thanks! GO GO! Lets see what kinda feelings my poem conveys to ppl.....love ya peeps!

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

kelieth
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since 2000-06-12
Posts 314
Normal IL - USA
3 posted 2000-07-08 01:40 AM


How 'bout "Searching through the storms", or "Loving in Vain".

Although I like Dennis' title to.   Great piece I hope she finds the lesson taught from Lonely nights.



Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."

midnightblues
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4 posted 2000-07-08 04:15 AM


Hi Kevin, thanks! Hmm 'Loving in Vain' sounds like her...heh *S*

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

Tramp Poet
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 754
Could Be Anywhere...
5 posted 2000-07-08 06:32 AM


course there is always, "Love Bites"
and maybe the sequel...
"Love Bites, and Then You Die"

lol thought i'd lighten things up a bit...
sorry for the odd sense of humor...
gee y'all think love has bitten the biker?

after all the name is...
< !signature-->

                                bleeding...

                         "Tis ink coming  
          from his arm,
       Captain!"



[This message has been edited by bleeding (edited 07-08-2000).]

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
6 posted 2000-07-08 06:46 AM


really enjoyed the poem, my brain is still half a sleep, title...surviving the storm.

  

"Death makes angels of us all and put wings where we once had shoulders, smooth as raven's wings. Jim Morrison

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
7 posted 2000-07-08 08:11 AM


Hi, M: Loved this poem, very surreal...how about... "Loves Storms of hope"...

Summers haunting melody
that awakens
the butterflies,
calling them to join
the dance
in their silent song
of praise to God.

ellie LeJeune


midnightblues
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597
Singapore
8 posted 2000-07-08 09:09 AM


bleeding - nup I love ur sense of humour! That was kewl... I've already decided to do a sequel!haha u really read my mind...

brian - surviving the storm...yeah she did! I wouldn't have thought of that myself. Thanks! *S*

ellie - I did have this feeling when this piece came to mind! *huGz* Love Storms of Hope...she's really hopeful isn't she?

Golly peeps u guys pamper me...I'm falling in love with our corner pub!


If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

kaile
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9 posted 2000-07-10 07:26 AM


midnight blues, how about "Stormy Survivor"?--she certainly seems to be this optimistic survivor alright

like the ending very much...leaves this reader wondering whether if her postivity would deflate or still remain strong

midnightblues
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Singapore
10 posted 2000-07-10 10:13 AM


Hi kaile, yeap my heroine is so optimistic...I must say I can't take too many heartbreaks. I guess this dream is actually my 'wish'. Kudos to all women seeking for love! Their all 'Survivors of the Storm'!

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

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