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TAP2
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA

0 posted 2000-07-06 12:11 PM


A crimson moon, there is blood in the air
Something has met death
The smell of putrid flesh, the scent of despair
Demons rising from the depths

Leathery wings taking flight
To take hold of this skybound soul
Clouds open as the acid rain
Consumes, lurking like a demon troll

Claws aspiring to rip
His ascending flesh from immortal bone
Taunting cackles in the night
Descending to evil's throne

But the skybound soul breaks free
To leave his torments behind
Sreaking toward a light above
To paradise sublime

Deep within the bowls of earth
A demon lord bows down
"Sire, we've lost another one
To the power of the crown"

-Jac Pierre

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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
1 posted 2000-07-06 07:53 PM


Very dark poem, written nicely. This sounds familiar though, have you posted it someone where else also (I do forum hop sometimes!)  
midnightblues
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597
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2 posted 2000-07-06 11:36 PM


Powerful yet poetic! How did you do it? Wow! I like the fourth stanza, tragic, yet inspiring. *S*

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

TAP2
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
3 posted 2000-07-07 01:11 AM


No I haven't posted this anywhere else but alot of my work runs along the same theme. I usually post in Teen Poetry #3, but this one seemed a little to dark for that group. I will continue to post here from time to time, but only that which I feel I can't post in my own (TP#3) forum.

Jac Pierre

kelieth
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since 2000-06-12
Posts 314
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4 posted 2000-07-07 11:58 AM


Tap2,
     Good work.  A bit dark in a romantic since.  Nice flow.

Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."

April Resi
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since 1999-10-18
Posts 119
Alabama
5 posted 2000-07-08 12:32 PM


I like this one a lot! Very dark, but kind of a happy ending twist at the end.
By the way, I think you were smart to post here instead of TP#3. It's mostly love and lost love poetry there...  (not always bad, it's just this one is different) Like I said, I'm checking out all of your work right now, and so far, I like it!!!!

TAP2
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
6 posted 2000-07-10 02:15 AM


Thank you all for allowing me to post this in here even though it's not my usual forum. Thank you for your kind words. I may post more in here at a later date.

-Jac Pierre

"I could have missed the pain
But I'd of had to miss The Dance"

-Garth Brooks-

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7 posted 2000-07-15 12:55 PM


Tap2~
A shade of dark that is becoming.
Any forum would welcome you with open arms.
Visit often.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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chibi_dragon
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since 2000-07-04
Posts 58

8 posted 2000-07-16 11:42 PM


Is that a dragon you're describing? Because if it is, Spyro oughta see it. Dragons are supposed to be good!
--Chibi

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