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The Lonely Shore (from when I was 11yrs)

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Yu Lan
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0 posted 07-04-2000 08:46 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Yu Lan

Hellooooo, a poem from when I was 11 years old..


The Lonely Shore


Tiny shells lie forlornly scattered,
On warm, wet sand.
Water lapping gently,
Against the shore,
Leaves fluffy white froth,
Stranded,
As it moves back down the beach.
Smooth wooden bodies,
With exciting tales,
Of rough journeys, on raging waters,
Now lie silent,
On a bed of sand.
Strings of rubbery beads,
Strung on leather seaweed straps,
Limp, baking in hot sun.
And above,
Gulls’ cries pierce the serenity,
Circling and reeling,
In blue paradise.



Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu


© Copyright 2000 Lynne Miura, née Chudley - All Rights Reserved
chibi_dragon
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1 posted 07-04-2000 09:08 PM       View Profile for chibi_dragon   Email chibi_dragon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chibi_dragon

Right now I am doing the dragon equivalent of crying... . Your poem sounds a little sad...
--the cute dragon
deleeme
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2 posted 07-04-2000 09:15 PM       View Profile for deleeme   Email deleeme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit deleeme's Home Page   View IP for deleeme

Yu Lan,
  Was trhis a poem written when you were twelve, or about an experience you had when you were twelve--I was not clear on that--either way, this is a a poem may lovely by the descriptiveness of the words you use to paint this lovely tropical or coastal scene.   Thanks for taking us to your paradise.   David
midnightblues
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3 posted 07-05-2000 08:54 AM       View Profile for midnightblues   Email midnightblues   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit midnightblues's Home Page   View IP for midnightblues

A melancholic piece, beautifully portrayed! Your painting of the picture inspires me. Thanks for the treat *S*
Denise
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4 posted 07-05-2000 09:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wonderfully done, Lynne. Beautifully descriptive!

Denise
kelieth
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5 posted 07-06-2000 01:57 AM       View Profile for kelieth   Email kelieth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit kelieth's Home Page   View IP for kelieth

Yu Lan,
     Touching piece for one so young.  I thus hope it's been better since.  Great writing.



Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."
Yu Lan
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6 posted 07-06-2000 02:09 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Thank you! ^_^

deleeme - I wrote this when I was 11 years old. ^_^

thanx cute dragon, yeah.. I guess it is.. almost.. more serene.. lonely.. ^_^

Midnightblues, Denise and Kevin.. thank you all for your kind responses.. ^_^


Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu


Tramp Poet
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Could Be Anywhere...


7 posted 07-06-2000 07:47 PM       View Profile for Tramp Poet   Email Tramp Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tramp Poet's Home Page   View IP for Tramp Poet

hey Yu,

you already know that this piece impressed me
...what catchs my attention is the promise
of greatness this early poem displays.

Lynne, don't ever stop writing, no matter what life serves up... realize your potential.  lol even if it takes til you're
old and gray and have grandchildren!

hugz,


bleeding...

"Tis ink coming
from his arm,
Captain!"

Yu Lan
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8 posted 07-06-2000 07:54 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

thank you Daniel.. ^_^ no.. I will never stop writing.. I love it too much.. ^_^

Thanx,
Luv,

Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu


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9 posted 03-29-2006 01:38 PM       View Profile for skyshine   Email skyshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit skyshine's Home Page   View IP for skyshine

Yu Lan, this is wonderful....you were only 11 when you wrote this! You have a great talent!

~sky

I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying....
~Tim McGraw

Yu Lan
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10 posted 04-01-2006 04:25 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Wow! You've been digging to find this, Skyshine! I haven't been to PIP for so long... I'm studying full time this year, and working the other part, lol.. Actually, I think I'll post my latest poem though. I've been away FAR too long.

Thanks so much!!

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

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11 posted 04-01-2006 11:58 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I am glad she did dig, as I had not seen this treasure.  Loved this as I live by the sea:

Smooth wooden bodies,
With exciting tales,
Of rough journeys, on raging waters,
Now lie silent,
On a bed of sand.

Good to read you and yes, do post one of your latest as it will be so good to read you again.
jamesjiao
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Backwaters of Avalon


12 posted 04-09-2006 06:09 AM       View Profile for jamesjiao   Email jamesjiao   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit jamesjiao's Home Page   View IP for jamesjiao

Hey Lynne,

Good to see you are posting again. Been hanging around here for the last 2 years without seeing your posts. I hope to see more of your recent poems soon.

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.


Yu Lan
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13 posted 04-09-2006 06:38 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Thanks James.. This isn't a recent one though, it's a very old one, lol... Skyshine went digging..
Yes, I've not been in for about that long.. 2 years.. SHOCKING.. Thanks for reading!

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

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