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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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Sweet Thang Shufflin in the doorway hat in hand, silly smile askin fo forgivness... “Been thinkin all day at work, couldn’t stop thinkin i shore am sorry.” “Canna y’all forgive me,” my sweethart... “I shore be sorry.” “Donna know whys I acted da fool, iz zit ok, honey?” “Man, I be dyin fo one o your smiles maybe jus a teensy, baby.” “Mama, canna y’all give a yo Daddy jus a little sugar?” “I be tellin ya thata itz my own fault shouldnna hollered at you.” “Iz a right sorry now I a picked y’all some flowers juz fo you, Mama!” “Do y’all think I coulda juz get a bite maybe to hold me o’re, baby?” Shufflin in the doorway hat in hand, silly smile askin fo forgivness... bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
Just a quick note of disclaimer... in no way is this piece construed or generated as a racist commentary. Tis simply a contrite man seeking forgivness from his woman. thanks, Daniel (aka... bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Bleeding, First of all your poetry is wonderful. It's a very good emotional piece. I see no need for apology. A work of art is what it will be in my eyes for eternity. Great Job.< !signature--> Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." [This message has been edited by kelieth (edited 07-04-2000).] |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
I love this one, Daniel! ^_^ Hey.. why didn't u submit this for voting!!  I can't vote on this here BRILLIANT poem! *_^Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Daniel; This a lovely poem of humility and love. I enjoyed the way it is written. Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. ellie LeJeune |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very sweet, Daniel!  Denise |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Yohz gentle giant! Didya woman's heart melt with your honeyed poem? Golly I love it! *S* If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
interesting style, really liked this alot. beautiful poem. "All my life what I mistook for friendly pats on the back Were really the hands that pushed me further and further down The more I struggle, the less |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
Thank yew fir aller suupporttt! bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Gosh man, this is so sweet thang...put smile big big on my face and wishing fo that woman to fogive y |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Man, it's just a sweet thang ! Love it! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cute write |
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