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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Well the little girl is temporarely back from summer vacation...better get to it!! _______________________________ I look down into darkness An eternal night Away and lost Without a light At the edge of my shattered soul I look back at this path At the life I'm livin' And realized with all my heart I could've gave more Than I've been given At the edge of my shattered soul Am I not who I want to be At the brink of death I wasn't I tried so many times; oh yes Many, many times I've tried my best There were few I've loved and lost At the edge of my shattered soul Have I ever come close to death? Oh yes; I can relate to that Even when death is where I'm at I stare at the memories flashing by And it makes me wonder why I'm standing at the edge of my shattered soul There are happy moments in our lives Those occurring now and those gone by I turn away from Death And I walk on my way And even then I say, "Why did I come here anyway?" [This message has been edited by a_little_girl (edited 07-01-2000).] |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
First of all I'd like to welcome thee. Your poem does touch inside of me. Second I would like to say I like the words, You have displayed. Great piece, I'm glad your heart won and found the strength to boldly move on.  Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very good poem...I can relate.  |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
This hits a little too close to home. I feel tears forming, so I better go. Good poem though. Joy [This message has been edited by JOY 14 (edited 07-01-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
There are happy moments in our lives Those occurring now and those gone by I turn away from Death And I walk on my way And even then I say, "Why did I come here anyway?" Why did I come here? I often thing that depression seeks us out, or maybe we don't know that we are looking for it. an excellent poem, I can never figure out why I allow myself to feel such sorrow either. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Well done That Girl.. ^^ You use the themes 'dark' and 'light' a lot in your poetry, don't you..? ^_^ I think this is a great poem, a real description of a 'shattered soul'.. Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
a_little_girl,pretty impressive poem...i like the way you link your stanzas to "At the edge of my shattered soul"...very cleverly done im glad to know the speaker in the poem is a survivor  |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
Yes I can FULLY relate to this. Very powerful and enigmatic. Well written. Allan |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Thank you for your replies. I actually didn't go through depression, but I know a few who had and survived. What I went through were severe mood swings. This poem is just their story. -------------------------------------- --Venus Macleod |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Here's my vote girl! A wee bit too close to my plight...*sniffles* Well well but I got over it and this is great! *S* If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
little_girl.. "why did i come here anyway...??" one of those endless questions, aye...i do it too..color me guilty..stepping right into the pain of things..i have to feel it before i can go on... glad youve come out of it..i always hope i dont get stuck there..! dg "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
PS..GREAT POEM!  dg "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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essenceofangels Junior Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 36 |
What a wonderful poem I enjoyed it much! essenceofangels |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Wow...this poem's kind of sad, but it's almost as beautiful as you are, little girl... Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
I had to look at this one again, and comment on it once more. I thought this dark image could use a little lighting the first time that I wrote it, without the last few stanzas. --Little Girl |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Another poem I'm glad you brought back to life. Great work here. I'm glad you survived the depression to continue to share you lovely poetry with us all. Dawn |
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Honey Bunch Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 99South Africa |
Oh Yes, it seems as if I've been down that road too. Wonderful poem! Hmm? Think it needs a repeat...."wonderful poem"! Helen |
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FlyingCloud Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151A little place inside my head |
*sigh* This poem has hit home for so many people... ^~Whoever does not love his work cannot hope that it will please others.~^ |
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