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Esmeralda Ponsonby
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0 posted 2000-06-24 11:33 AM


Maybe in Distance

Maybe in distance, but never in heart
will my desires ever be able to impart.

The little vibrations of thought waves
placed into action blankets and paves,
a path of desperation I couldn't touch,
without the aid of knowledge to crutch.

See, your pack of angels would devour
my longing soul with such divine power,
to find my heart again near impossible,
so I cling to distance because it's plausible.




[This message has been edited by Esmeralda Ponsonby (edited 06-24-2000).]

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Justbleu
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1 posted 2000-06-24 11:47 AM


A wonderful piece this be!!  It has been great to see all the talents of others taking a single phrase and writing around and about it in soo very many ways!!  I do like this!!!  Thank You for taking my challenge...it was a pleasure to read it!!
Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17
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2 posted 2000-06-24 02:31 PM


Esmeralda,
  This is Great!The part I liked best was:

See your pack of angels would devour
my longing soul with such divine power,
to find my heart again near impossible,
so I cling to distance because it's plausible

Great writing!  Dennis :^)

brian madden
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3 posted 2000-06-24 03:15 PM


Esmeralda, an excellent poem. wonderful response to the challenge.

A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral.
Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

kaile
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4 posted 2000-06-24 07:06 PM


short easy INTENSE read...like the way you express so much in so few lines....

i too like the last two lines best:
to find my heart again near impossible
so i cling to distance because it's plausible

[This message has been edited by kaile (edited 06-24-2000).]

Denise
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5 posted 2000-06-24 07:57 PM


Yes, intense and well written! Very well done, Esmeralda!

Denise

Esmeralda Ponsonby
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6 posted 2000-06-26 09:52 AM


I thank you all most kindly for reading and replying, it's much appreciated.
kelieth
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7 posted 2000-06-28 09:25 AM


Excellent Job.  



Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."

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