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Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463
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0 posted 2000-06-22 03:34 PM


You took everything,
Including my pride,
When you left that day,
All alone I just cried!

Our savings, our future,
Dissappeared as a mist,
I really got angry,
I really was pisst!

Now you want forgivness,
Say it was a mistake,
You seek reconciliation,
How much can I take?

Will I ever again trust you ?
I'll have trouble with that part,
Maybe in a distance,
But never in heart!



© Copyright 2000 Dennis L. White - All Rights Reserved
Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
1 posted 2000-06-22 05:04 PM


Dennis, Excellent job on this, I like it.
kelieth
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since 2000-06-12
Posts 314
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2 posted 2000-06-23 12:50 PM


Exellent poem.  I like this one and even have a name that it fits.  

Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."

kaile
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singapore
3 posted 2000-06-24 12:12 PM


Dennis,

Even your darker poetry is treated nicely with a dose of humour...Love the last stanza lots

Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
4 posted 2000-06-24 12:30 PM


Oh I so loved what you did with it!!  Kaile is right about the last stanza!!!!  Challenge met well, Thank You for taking it!!  Like it lots!!
Bridgette  


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

brian madden
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ireland
5 posted 2000-06-24 08:46 AM


Now you want forgivness,
Say it was a mistake,
You seek reconciliation,
How much can I take?

excellent response to the challenge.

A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral.
Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

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