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kelieth
Member

since 2000-06-12

Posts 314
Normal IL - USA

0 posted 2000-06-22 02:33 AM

LIFE or LOVE??

One's Life or love can be whole,
Were they not alone
To act upon one's heart and soul
Can bring upon a home.

Joy was there
To hear the tears
Of a hollow heart
The home was gone
I should've known
The answer from the start.

Life is not to be forgot,
The heart is not to die
I think of her every day,
She's always on my mind

Here at last,
I live the past.
Everyday and night
The love is there
For I still care.
Somewhere deep inside.

Though I know I shouldn't go,
I long to end this strife
Our child has grown to have a home,
with his lovely wife.

On I'll go
To let alone
Our son and his wife
I hope he'll know
I only go
To be by her side.
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Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."

[This message has been edited by kelieth (edited 06-22-2000).]

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite

since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

1 posted 2000-06-22 05:15 PM

Kevin, With this one I imagined a widowed parent who was sad, but carried on for his child. Now his child has grown and started his own life and Dad who's been ailing is ready to meet with his wife in heaven as soon as the sweet Lord chooses.

Nice job, I enjoyed.

Yu Lan
Senior Member

since 2000-04-13

Posts 1462
New Zealand

2 posted 2000-06-23 06:31 AM

wow.. what a perfect description, kaileth..
yeah, my interpretation was somewhat similar to L.D's, tho I was slightly confused in the last verse,

On I'll go
To let alone
Our son and his wife
I hope he'll know
I only go
To be by her side

as it kinda sounds as though it is the son's wife u only go on for.. which can't be right.. (can it? *_^) so, just a little confused here.. lovely poetry..

Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu

Broken_Winged_Angel
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 994
Small Town, Somewhere

3 posted 2000-06-23 08:30 AM

Very touching and sad.. I really liked it.. Its achingly beautiful.

I awake to a world I don't want. There is no transition for me. I am in heaven. I am in hell.

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

4 posted 2000-06-23 02:30 PM

i enjoyed this one very much. as the others did and i thank you for replieing to poem in here. good job here i like it keep it up.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

Casonova
Junior Member

since 2000-04-29

Posts 35
Mays Landing

5 posted 2000-06-24 04:17 PM

kelieth, Thanks for the good read, I enjoyed it very much, keep it up...

Casanova...

Desire and determination, can bring any goal within reach.

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

6 posted 2000-06-24 07:59 PM

heratwrenchingly piece which bares a brave troubled soul for all

i like these lines best:
Joy was there
To hear the tears
Of a hollow heart

very nice description here

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