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Sven
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0 posted 06-21-2000 08:50 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sven

morning rain falls
lonely heart calls
echoing these halls
shaking these walls

sad voice calls
wandering the halls
pounding the walls
afternoon rain falls

pacing the halls
climbing the walls
night rain falls
quiet soul calls

tearing the walls
morning rain falls
scared body calls
running the halls

single tear falls
returning love calls
filling the halls
shattering these walls

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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1 posted 06-21-2000 09:08 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

The repetition of the rhyme scheme works very well with this subject matter. Well done, Sven!

Denise
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2 posted 06-21-2000 11:39 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Good work, Sven!

Elizabeth


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3 posted 06-22-2000 02:38 AM       View Profile for kelieth   Email kelieth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit kelieth's Home Page   View IP for kelieth

Great Job.  I look forward to reading more.  


Kevin

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Hmm..You've managed to leave me speechless for a few moments.. I really, really like this.  Wonderful job.

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5 posted 06-23-2000 01:15 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

LOL,Sven,this is creativity and originality in its finest!!

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Sven,
I also liked the repeating lines much.  One thing leads to another in this poem.  Nice!

Joy

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And this same flower that smiles today
To-morrow will be dying.

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7 posted 06-24-2000 03:09 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

a great poem I love the use of the four words walls calls etc. in different context.
wonderful.

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8 posted 06-24-2000 11:25 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

This is a little darker then most of your work.  Written from heart for sure.

Marina




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9 posted 06-25-2000 05:46 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Thank you all my friends. . . this one just kind of fell into place. . . it's funny how that will happen sometimes. . .

Thank you. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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very nicely done
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