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Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
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0 posted 2000-06-21 12:43 PM


I haven't written a lot of haiku, here are a couple tho, as kelieth mentioned he hadn't read any..


Flirtatious flowers
Smiling at a passing bee
Flutter their lashes.


Trapped beneath the sky,
Clouds so teasing, gently float
Jump up, I can’t fly.


Lynne




"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu


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Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17
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1 posted 2000-06-21 06:54 AM


Lynne,
  Excellent, Please grace us with some more of these. Encore, Encore!
Dennis :^)



Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)

allan
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since 2000-04-09
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On the road
2 posted 2000-06-21 12:48 PM


These are so good! Such graceful use of language.  
Sunshine
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3 posted 2000-06-21 01:48 PM


Ah, I needed a Haiku fix...and quite a lovely one at that!  More, please!

Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


Honeybee
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4 posted 2000-06-21 08:16 PM


~Lynne~

These are so well written.  I absolutely loved the first one, it is one of the best haikus that I have ever read, what a lovely way to personify the flower like that, it's a unique take on the situation     Please write some more for us!

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-21-2000).]

Yu Lan
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5 posted 2000-06-23 06:18 AM


*big smiles!* Thank you!

Well, indeed I shall have 2 write some more then! ^_^ actually, I think I have saved a few of m earlier ones.. somewhere.. ^^

thank you all for such lovely replies..

Luv, Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu


kaile
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6 posted 2000-06-23 11:39 AM


with haiku as great as these, its a wonder why you don't write some more to share with us....i agree with Melissa--i am hooked on haiku(as you probably know) and its really hard to provide a refreshingly new take on something we see everyday...but you have done very well with both your haiku and personally, i think the first one is a WINNER!

more haiku, please!

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