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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand 
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Rain falls heavily, Gives way to pretty flowers, And summer sunshine. "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I am very impressed, this truly is a beautiful haiku, I can picture it! However, I do have one criticism, please correct me if I am wrong, but I noticed that you are missing something to do with Winter in your seasonal haiku. Example: "Rain falls heavily" (can pertain to Autumn or Spring) "Gives way to pretty flowers" (pertaining to Spring) "And summer sunshine (pertaining to summer) Yu Lan, I never like to criticize, especially a talented poet such as yourself, but I just had to mention what I have noticed. Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
Yu Lan, This is beautiful & pictureque, an enjoyable read! David |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
good one, yu lan! its kind of tough getting all 4 seasons in there isnt it!  rain falling could be winter, no? (just thinking on melissas comment..) anyway, good job!  dg "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Another great haiku ! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i also took "rain falls heavily" to mean both autumn and winter....."and gives way to pretty flowers....and summer sunshine".....like the way you show the changes in seasons.....for me, it's like once i bear through cold harsh winter, as a reward i get to experience the joy of flowers and sunshine! thanx for trying this out, Yu Lan....never read ur haiku before....perhaps u will like to share more with us |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanx! Mel.. nah, i meant rain ie Winter and falls ie Fall/Autumn ^_^ Kaile.. haven't u?! Oh, I was so sure I had posted some, I have done a few haiku.. I'll post a few more later them, k? ^^ thank you all.. Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Lynne, You are very good at these, WRITE ON! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has past Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanx Dennis.. ^^ I will! hehe, actually, i don't think anyone could STOP me from writing, lol. ^^ I'd most likely go insane! Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
YuLan~ I've so enjoyed reading the Haiku's here. It is a pleasurable artistic form. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank you Marge.. ^_^ yes.. I like to read haikus.. and quite enjoy writing them too.. ^_^ Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
I really enjoyed your seasonal haiku! In some areas, winter means snow, but in others it is only rain. Very clever! Debbie |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Yu Lan, this is so pretty! But I still duno wad's a haiku...*S* nevertheless I enjoyed this If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank you Debbie! Yeah.. hehe.. we've had a little snow here, some winters.. but usually just rain.. midnightblues.. glad u liked it.. thank you. ^_^ chek your e-mail.. Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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