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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA 
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(not my best effort- but a quick try-using haiku) Butterflies heatwave Leaves fluttering memories When cold blankets come. "GOD GIVES- but man must open his hand." (German Proverb) |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Maybe not, but still an enjoyable haiku. Joy |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
David, it's good to see you in the Corner Pub. "Not your best effort!" I disagree, this is a great haiku, very unique and creative. Challenge exceptionally well met! The only criticism I have is that it seems that one season is missing, I could be wrong, please let me know. Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
wow... not your best? a beautiful image. much enjoyed ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde ----- |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
David; What do you mean, not your best effort? I loved it cause it's about butterflies! Love, Sis C):?) Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. ellie LeJeune |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
Melisa H.--I claim to have included all four seasons on a technicality-- Butterflies=Spring Heatwave=summer Cold Blankets(snow)=winter Leaves(Though used as a verb)=is my allusion to Fall or autum. Thank you all for your kind words and encouragement---David |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
if this is not your best effort, then i will really want to read those haiku that you think are your best!!!  love it,esp the second line:leaves fluttering memories....use of the word "memories" is interesting yet appropriate thanx for trying this out |
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