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kaile
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0 posted 2000-06-16 12:51 PM


There was once a hen called Patch
Sparkling golden eggs she always hatched
All the hens were very sad
Desperate, they all laid eggs mad
But alas!no one else was her match!

© Copyright 2000 heng kaile - All Rights Reserved
deleeme
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since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA
1 posted 2000-06-16 04:28 AM


Your limerick is well alotted,
You posted it and I bought it
No need to explain,
Why good can cause pain
'Cause when you got it-you just got it!

I thing that gold egg-lay and You, have both Got it!!!     David
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 "GOD GIVES- but man must open his hand." (German Proverb)



[This message has been edited by deleeme (edited 06-16-2000).]

JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
2 posted 2000-06-16 01:14 PM


Cute limerick!  Here is one just for u.

A stagecoach took off down the road
Sopping only for passangers to load
Alas, upon going to fast
The wheels spun off and were cast
Causing havock in the town of Facode!

I don't think anyone can make a bad limerick if they follow the ryhme-line rule!

Joy

kelieth
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since 2000-06-12
Posts 314
Normal IL - USA
3 posted 2000-06-17 12:49 PM


I saw nothing wrong with this limrick.   I think it's good.

 Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."

Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
4 posted 2000-06-18 09:14 AM


LOL I liked it kaile and you got the most important thing about limerick right....it's funny   But, just like haiku, there's a bit more to limerick then just the rhyme and the plot.....follow this link and it will show you the way to Nan's mysterious world....

/pip/Forum22/HTML/000067.html

Have fun !

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