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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
I knew a man a strange old man He’d walk the town each day He just seemed to plod around And dream his time away To everyone he looked so strange In his dirty long grey coat With old white sneakers on his feet And on a pipe he’d tote The children called him funny names Like ‘Ghoul’ and ‘Sad’ and ‘Fink But I never saw him get annoyed He’d just……… smile and wink Sometimes I’d see him in the park Just dreaming on the seat He used to whistle simple tunes And always tap his feet And then he’d lie upon the grass Or use a tree trunk as a chair And in a little scruffy pad He’d sketch the flowers there Now everyone across the town Thought his sketches very fine And many Toffs would collect them all And discuss them over wine His house was down a narrow lane Well it really was …….a shack With three black cats upon the gate And a horse tied round the back His garden packed with bright wild flowers Was such a pretty sight And his light was always burning late As he sketched all through the night That day he never walked the town And he was never seen again Many people realised And sprinted down that lane They burst into the crumpled house And by the huge fire place They found him dead upon his bed A smile across his face His rooms were full of paintings rare And to this very day They show them to commemorate A Dreamer………passed away Jon Mewett |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Jon, this is fantastic, I love it!  < !signature-->Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 06-09-2000).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Wow, This is excellent, I love it. |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Jon; This is an enchanting story that had me mesmerized from minute one. Ellie 02 |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~JON~ Yet another excellent poem by you. You have given the cliche "that you don't know what you have until it's gone" meaning. The town's people didn't realize until the old man was gone that his differences and "strangeness" added a uniqueness to the town and that he added beautiful flowers to life, all the while they took him for granted. Excellent moral to your story. I love the ending: "That day he never walked the town and he was never seen again many people realized and sprinted down that lane" "They burst into the crumpled house and by the huge fire place they found him dead upon his bed a smile across his face" That is a perfect ending. Although the old man has died, he had a smile on his face to show the town's people that his life had meaning and that he was content in creating works of art. And, might I add, that this poem was a work of art. You should enter this in a poetry contest as well. If you go to www.bluemountain.com, scroll down and they have a site where you can enter poems and win cash prizes. Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
umm.. what can I say?! ^_^ another brilliant work of art Jon.. just fabulous.. I do love the scenes you set with your poetry.. Lynne |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx everyone your so kind again. Melissa you are very astute. You've turned the key here OK. It's a sorta prophet not known in his own town thing as you say. One more thing in the story the 'Toffs'represent the society types of the town who collect his sketches.sorta admitting he may have been strange but they knew what 'Talent was. However when they burst in at the end they discover 'Paintings' of rare beauty,so good that even now they show them as a brag that this man lived in their town. The sketches were only the tip of the Dreamers ability. Although when he was alive they tried to ignore him. The dreamer sorta new this and was happy in his world with HIS art. Perhaps the last verse should have been stronger? Best wishes Jon [This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 06-10-2000).] |
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childomine Senior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 818st. petersburg, FL |
This is wonderful Jon. Gone but not forgotten... I felt saddness at the name calling and such a joy at his response. Wonderful poem. |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx Child And God bless to that. Jon |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Very warm story poem. That is my favorite style of poetry now. It's something I started a month or so ago...I just love it. You did very well with this one. So sad, yet beautiful. Bravo! |
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Necro Draconis Member
since 2000-05-19
Posts 115 |
One of the most beautiful poems I have read in a long time. Great job  Let nature guide your soul. Follow the path that nature gives. |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Thanx to you both. Yep I kinda like narrative poems too they can work on so many levels. Thanx again Jon |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Jon- You're right. This could mean so much to someone. Who knows, they could have had this very experience or something close to it. I love poems like this too. Writing them, but especialy reading them. Joy |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, Jon, I love it! I think the ending is just fine the way it is...it is my most favorite verse too! Denise |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Wow, this is better than anything I've ever written--and no offense to any of the incredible poets that post here, but--probably better than most that I've even seen... It takes quite a bit to impress me, I've seen quite a few things that would astound other people...but this one tops my list as one of the best poems I've ever read in my fourteen years of existence. I'd swear to God but since I don't do that kind of thing, I'll just leave it at this. Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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William P Bussey Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 188 |
Jon, I thought I would check in and see what was on the board, I never expected some thing so grand, being one of those old guys, this is very touching to me, as I put my self in his shoes, thank God I am not alone in this world, but this is outstanding, you are very good. Bill |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Jon how do you come up with such amazing stories!!??!! They are wonderful!! This one also has alot of great rhythm,the words are superb!! swamp faeryie And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
John the emotion here is amazing the story sad and all to true. What can I say other than It's a work of art. Great job. Kevin |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Jon, Excellent piece! I can visual the activities of the old man. I loved this, the more I read it, the more I know him. Marcy |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wow..jon, this is such a cool poem! i love it so much..i'm sorry its taken me so long to get around to reading it..i'm way behind! but wow..definately..WOW! a wonderfully written story!! dg "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Golly this is another of my favourites!!! I love it!!! Drama, nostalgy and the joy of simplicity in one....DIVINE!!! Hey why isn't it up for votes??? *pouTz* *S* gimme mooore!!!! If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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