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Jon Mewett
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0 posted 2000-06-05 05:26 AM


When I was a wide-eyed child
Of maybe six or seven
While idling in the garden once
I caught a glimpse of heaven

It was down the winding leafy path
So far away it seemed
Just beside the Lilly pond
That’s where I’d sit and dream

My back against the old oak tree
My time I’d sit and bide
Inside the big old rambling bush
Sometimes I’d run and hide

I’d lay and dream of childish things
Like fishing and huge haystacks
Finding birds nests on a walk
And playing lone black jacks

This was an early summer morn
The dew still on the ground
With an old log for my pillow
I heard a wondrous sound

Squatting on my new grazed knee
Through the bushes…underneath
I saw a ………flower fairy
Dancing on a leaf

My eyes were stabbed with wonder
At the small and elf like shape
Her wings were like a dragonfly’s
And petals formed her cape

She pirouetted round and round
And hummed a lilting tune
And as she sang played with the breeze
Her face was like the moon

The beauty of her song and dance
The day at her command
When she got weary she’d sit and sip
A dewdrop from her hand

Everywhere she lightly touched
Became a lightning glow
With stardust falling from her hair
It amazed and thrilled me so

The radiated happiness
Filled all the den around
But when her name I tried to guess
She was gone without a sound

I can recall it vividly
The imprint on my mind
I call her Columbine to myself
She was so sweet and kind

Many lifetimes past since then
The childish vision dimmed
But I remember Columbine
When song and laughter brimmed

So now when turmoil takes its toll
I lay as in a trance
I close my eyes and cast a dream
And watch the fairy dance


Jon Mewett




[This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 06-05-2000).]

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Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
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1 posted 2000-06-05 05:57 AM


wow, held me captive 'til the end, Jon.. what magic in this poem! lovely..

Lynne

Jana Tovey
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2 posted 2000-06-05 07:19 AM


I once left a treat on my windowsill for the faeries and the next morning it was GONE!!  
A nearby magpie told me that he hadn't taken it.  In fact he assured me that magpies would never dare take a faerie's treat!

Lovely poem...lovely garden.  Thanks for sharing.

Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
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Missouri
3 posted 2000-06-05 09:05 AM


This is so stunning, I am not big on fairy tales but you definately made this one seem so real, especially from that little boy's point of view. Excellent job.
childomine
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since 2000-01-25
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4 posted 2000-06-05 10:02 AM


This is wonderful Jon - so light.  I adore the seventh verse.  The little boys garden was full of magic and with your words magic was spun once again.
Sunshine
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5 posted 2000-06-05 10:33 AM


What a great children's [adult's] poem!  Well done!

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


Swåmp¤Faerÿie
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since 2000-03-29
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6 posted 2000-06-05 01:27 PM


COOOL!! This is was so fun a sweet!! But then you know how i like faeryies!! What a wonderful tale. Jon your poems are so...i duno they're tales and stories more than aything else,and your words are just divine!! Great poem!!

swamp¤faeryie


 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

Little_Spyro
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since 2000-01-09
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San Diego, CA, USA
7 posted 2000-06-05 02:09 PM


Yeesh!!!

Even a supposedly-fantasy creature like a dragon gets overloaded by this, Jon!!! BEAUTIFUL job!!   Wow...lol now you've got me talking like Swamp (not that there's anything bad about that )...you know, you should submit this to the main Netpoets site and have them put it up there permanently! It's THAT good!    


Again, incredible job!  


Little Spyro T. Dragon

Alle'cram
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8 posted 2000-06-05 03:18 PM


Jon, Breathtaking!! AAwwe, I was right there. What a sight to behold. I can see the little fairy (dragon fly) on the leaf. Great, great job and I thank you for this treat.  Marcy
brian madden
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9 posted 2000-06-05 04:57 PM


a wonderful poem, lovely. a glimpse of childhood innocence.


She pirouetted round and round
And hummed a lilting tune
And as she sang played with the breeze
Her face was like the moon

The beauty of her song and dance
The day at her command
When she got weary she’d sit and sip
A dewdrop from her hand




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Then work came and made us free
What price now for a shallow piece of dignity"
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Culture, alienation, boredom and despair"

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Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
10 posted 2000-06-05 09:03 PM


Wow, what a special treat you had as a child, and what a special treat you gave us here in your memories of it.  
I'm glad she's still with you to dance your turmoils away.  

Denise
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11 posted 2000-06-06 09:17 AM


This is delightful, Jon!  

Denise

Jon Mewett
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12 posted 2000-06-06 10:02 AM


Well where can I start.
I'm a bit overwhelmed with your kindness on this one.

Spose I'm just a big kid at heart.

Thanks folks

Jon

Honeybee
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13 posted 2000-06-06 11:25 AM



Wow Jon what a dreamy and captivating poem.  I loved it!  I have re-read it many times over, it is really a superior poem.  How refreshing it is to read of childhood innocence and fantasies.  There is one thing that I noticed, which no one else has mentioned, it's not a criticism, but I am intriqued by the interesting name that you chose for the fairy - Columbine. I'm probably being overly analytical,(most Virgos are afterall LOL), but did you choose this name in a sense to weave a small universal truth about what happenned at Columbine in Colorado about the shootings?
If so, excellent technique to show how once these children were innocent like the child in the garden with the magical fairy.  Now in the States and around the world, sadly,  everyone sees Columbine as a tragic place, but you made the name Columbine seem beautiful again with the fairy's sweet actions.  I dunno, maybe I'm just rambling on, but that really caught my eye.  I'm probably wrong.  I'd be really embarrassed if I was way off base here.  But, I had to mention it.

"I can recall it vividly
the imprint on my mind
I call her Columbine to myself
she was so sweet and kind"

"Many lifetimes passed since then
the childish visions dimmed
but I remember Columbine
when song and laughter brimmed"

Why you chose this name really interests me, so please explain.  Excellent poem!  My favourite to date  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

Jon Mewett
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14 posted 2000-06-07 05:03 AM


Mellissa,

Bullseye.

It often occurs to me, and I accept that a poem once written and cast out into the world is open to many different readings.
All of these readings are correct to the reader.In a way I regard the poet as a target and the readings as arrows.When you hear or read these replies some are near misses and some enlighten the writer of something they were not aware of when they wrote the piece,the writer is just a conduit of something unexplainable.

But very few arrows hit the soft creative centre as yours did.

This poem about the loss of childhood innocence is mainly set in the past tense and is a vision from memory.There is a transition verse from past to present where I try to guess the fairies name.The verses you quote are from the present time.

To name my 'Fairy' I set myself criterior.

It had to be a Rare flower (she's a flower Fairy after all)

It had to have a mystical quality.

It had to represent loss ( of childhood if possible)

Because it was now about today it had to be relavent in some way.

The rest you know.

This as been quite staggering for me I'm still reeling from your shot. (In a nice way )

I feel very humble indeed.

Thankyou

Jon

PhaerieChild
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15 posted 2000-06-07 12:27 PM


Jon...this is truly beautiful! I too love faeries and have a collection of pewter and crystal ones but none compare to the beauty of the one you write about. I am in awe of this poem and have re-read it numerous times. Absolutely stuuning piece.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



Honeybee
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Posts 5372
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16 posted 2000-06-07 04:42 PM



Jon, I'm glad that you were pleased with my reply.  And to think, I thought that I was wrong because no one else commented like I did.  Take it as a high compliment, for me to understand what you are trying to say in the poem means that you are an excellent story teller and that you are a true poet.  
Thank you for further explaining your point to me.     Now that I have re-read your poem again, it just gets better and really has a great deal of wisdom to it.  You should really get this piece published or enter a poetry contest. After reading this poem by you, I really have a lot of respect for you and your talent.  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-07-2000).]

Alle'cram
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17 posted 2000-06-07 04:55 PM


Jon, Here I am again.
Must agree with Melissa, should be submitted. Once you allow the beauty to sink
in with understanding, it takes on new life.
What a tribute to "Columbine" from a poets
view.  Thanks Melissa for asking questions and hitting right on target. Like this one very, very much, for many reasons. marcy

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18 posted 2000-06-07 06:04 PM


I believe in Fairys

 We are all poets, its just some people dont know it yet.

Jon Mewett
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19 posted 2000-06-08 12:08 PM


Well I too believe in Fairies.

This as really been a wonderful thing for me.
It seems my 'Columbine'as been imbued with the potency of understanding.

I realise now this surely was a glimpse of heaven.

I don't really know how to go about publishing this piece.

If anyone can help Columbine to keep dancing.......?


Thanx

Jon

[This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 06-09-2000).]

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