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Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304


0 posted 2000-06-01 07:26 AM


Is there one with soul so dead
The creeping dawn he doesn’t cherish
With eyes so dark and clouded grey
In his view the sunsets ……perish

When he sees the spider gay
Alight it’s dewy weave
Will not the bunting of the rose
Bid his sorrows leave

Will not the white and dashing cloud
Bring his voice to song
Have his thoughts on saddened things
Been dwelling far to long

Can’t he watch the diving Swift?
It’s joy of summer bright
Soft caress his sodden thoughts
And bring his heart to flight

Cannot the trickling of the brook
Cast in him a dream
Or the butterfly upon its wing
Impress on him the theme

Does not the chatter of the leaves
While talking to the grass
The gentle partner to his soul
This freedom does it pass

As I sit among these ruins
This sadness in my head
Tell me if you kindly will
Of a one with soul so dead

Jon Mewett


Hi Everyone

Well I'm back from my travels.
This time I visited Dresden in the former East Germany. That city still carries the scars of war,with buildings still raised to the ground.

This small somewhat futile poem was written while I sat on the West side of the Berlin Wall my thoughts still on the sights of Dresden.

The whole experience was incongruous to me.

It seemed to make me feel inadequate and small.

Jon



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childomine
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
1 posted 2000-06-01 09:04 AM


Jon, a haunting image you have painted here.  I see you didn't slack off on your talents while away.  Welcome back.  

"Is there one with soul so dead
The creeping dawn he doesn't cherish..."

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
2 posted 2000-06-01 12:59 PM


OOOOOH!! Jon your poetry is SO good!! I always know that it will be good as soon as i start reading!! This is wonderful....i especially like
"When he sees the spider gay
Alight it’s dewy weave
Will not the bunting of the rose
Bid his sorrows leave"

that is so great!! The touch of melancholy is a the perfect thread for this all to ride on. AWESOME!!

swampie swampola



 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

Jana Tovey
Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257
USA
3 posted 2000-06-01 01:00 PM


It sounds as if you latched on to the remaining energy of one (or many) imprisoned behind the Berlin Wall.  Good poem, thoughtful analysis of the effects of freedoms' lost.
dgvarner
Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
4 posted 2000-06-01 03:44 PM


jon..a little gloom..a little doom...but really great reading--great writing!  

cant help but wonder sometimes if too much thought on saddened things can cause saddness to become a permanent fixture..


"Will not the white and dashing cloud
Bring his voice to song
Have his thoughts on saddened things
Been dwelling far to long"



 "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner

Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

5 posted 2000-06-01 08:26 PM


Welcome home, Jon! This poem is excellent! Very well done!

Denise

Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

6 posted 2000-06-02 10:47 AM


Well thanx everyone for the welcome back.

I find it most difficult to understand Mans inhumanity to Man.

But there was hope, the peoples spirit,they were so kind and friendly.
I did find it spiritualy very disturbing,the monuments and everything,very wierd.

Jon

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
7 posted 2004-12-25 11:18 AM


I am touched by this
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