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Astraea
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since 1999-11-09
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California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now

0 posted 2000-05-29 12:21 PM


Unspoken

So still this night does lay
The creeping wind so cold it burned
Too silent without being broken
So still my eyes again stay
On your figure, turned
And all the things unspoken

Memories drifted by, too late
I want to race and leap into your arms
But I know not if your heart beats
For all I hear is my own thundering
Touching my head and soul deep
Reaching through peace

How easy could it be, I think?
To say what your eyes and body tells?
How hard is it to repent?
For something never said?
Each time I push these tears away
Don't remember, leave, be free!

I find I can't forget.

I want to tell you everything that's me
Give you the whole world and more!
I've prayed for your life to leap
High, higher than mine would ever breach
But these wants, desires, pleads
Have never left the dreams I sleep

So now you're gone; I am too, with you
If nothing else I wanted to grieve
Not my heart, my gift and companion for you
Not my life, and all the shatters you left
Instead I cry now for my closed lips
And all the things I left unspoken


Okay, please give me a break?  I haven't written a thing in about 3 months and this was about the work of 5 minutes' spanse.

  Hello again, guess which maiden's back?  

~Astraea


 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."



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dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
1 posted 2000-05-29 12:35 PM


i love this..i'll read it again!
a quick chill ran up my spine and onto my cheeks as i got to the end..leaving things unspoken, unsaid...i've done too much of that myself..i've since decided to tell people how i feel..even if they knock me down, at least they know my heart..leave not to chance!  
good writing--will look for more from you!


 "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
2 posted 2000-05-29 07:44 AM


Astraea, This is an excellent poem I could feel your pain and could relate to the words so often left unsaid.
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
3 posted 2000-05-29 10:58 AM


Welcome back, it's good to see you haven't lost your touch!  
Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
4 posted 2000-05-29 04:53 PM


Astraea,
        wish that I could write something like this in 5 minutes. . . it's wonderful. . .

The things that are left unsaid are always the things that haunt us. . .

Good to see you back. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

5 posted 2000-05-30 09:13 AM


This is a wonderfull piece.

Gracefuly penned and full of a sad realisation of something lost.

Great

Jon

Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184
Missouri
6 posted 2000-05-30 09:18 AM


You said so much here, with great feeling. There is no need for an apology. This is so true, we should always part in peace and love, for who knows?, but God, if we ever will see our loved here on earth again. Your poem is beautiful in all aspects.
Jana Tovey
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since 2000-05-30
Posts 257
USA
7 posted 2000-05-31 11:32 AM


For this to have taken so little time must mean that the words are deeply heartfelt.  It speaks volumes about someone who thinks that they are speechless.  

[This message has been edited by Jana Tovey (edited 05-31-2000).]

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