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Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand

0 posted 2000-05-20 08:04 PM


hello.. this will probably confuse u a little, hehe, as to what it is actually talking about, but, I'm not letting on, no clues, I want your own interpretations. *_^ hehe


Hide And Seek Words

In my mind,
A thousand things I have to say.
In my heart,
A thousand things I feel.
In my mind,
Words elude me,
Playing little games,
They let me know they’re there,
But stay hidden from
My searching, probing thoughts.
I explain to myself,
But not in words;
There are no friends inside my mind;
All play torturing, dreary games.
Hide and seek,
Now come out,
When I don’t need them anymore.
They tease me inside,
Like I am teased outside,
When a word decides to hide from me,
Tickling my consciousness.
Why? I ask them.
Why are you so cruel?!
But they don’t answer;
They’re hiding again;
As I try to write them down.


© Copyright 2000 Lynne Miura, née Chudley - All Rights Reserved
Lonelypoet
Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 123
Conklin,NY,USA
1 posted 2000-05-20 08:42 PM


Yu Lan,
Good poem, and yes you did confuse me. Though I beleive this poem describes the cruelty of people and how it affects our minds and souls.

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
2 posted 2000-05-20 11:19 PM


Your looking for a word...mebe the perfect word for a poem...but it's on the tip of your tongue and it just won't come out and let you find it.....and mebe a hint of clashing emotions.am i right??¿ LOL...nahhh....cool poem...it's kinda playful...i like it!!

swamp


 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
3 posted 2000-05-21 02:39 AM


Thank u lonelypoet & swamp..
hehe, yeah, thought it would confuse u a wee bit.. *_^

yeah, u r half right there lonelypoet.. hehe.. and swamp is another half right (I wont say the other half.. 'coz there are many 'halves' to a poem. lol)

Mmm, not so much for a poem, but just in everyday life, something that my family don't understand.. when i struggle to find a word in normal speech.. so, of course, as u would, they laugh.. as does everyone else.. and it kinda does have a negative effect on a person.. as I can never really explain things 2 ppl, without having to substitute a word I wanted, for one I didn't want, and STILL not be understood, and then have it rammed down your throat, unknowingly, by your friends and family.. kinda frustrating.. ^_^

Anywayzz.. thanx both of ya, (woops, hehe, should have left the explanation 'til a few more had given opinions, huh? *_^)

-Lynne

Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

4 posted 2000-05-21 10:18 AM


Being misunderstood can be very frustrating, for sure! Great poem!

Denise

Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
5 posted 2000-05-21 07:52 PM


hehe, yeppers.. agreed. ^_^ thanx Denise.. *_^

Lynne

jamesjiao
Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268
Backwaters of Avalon
6 posted 2000-05-21 09:00 PM


Hmm, yeap, never get deterred at explaining things to people Lynne. There is nothing to prevent you from trying again as long as you have the courage to do it. Sometimes the absence of courage is what I find in you, Lynne. There is nothing wrong with people laughing at you, 'cause not all the people think the same as you do, and it happens to be your family. If it really isn't gonna work, talk to someone else, eh that's what I am here for too. But anyway, it's not a bad poem from you, I noticed that you like to use the word 'elude' in your writing, haha. (Um, that's a friendly laugh-ish smile, thank you)

 Sorrow is the starting point of happiness. Without sorrow, a man can never realize the true meaning of happiness.

Jõmes

Alle'cram
Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
7 posted 2000-05-21 10:36 PM


Hi Yu, Ready,set,go, start writting. Where'd they go, my words, my poem? Ugh, I'll wait.
Busy, busy, there they are, the words, a poem, I'll remember this time (no pen,paper).
Ready, set, go, start writting,.....where'd they go????

Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
8 posted 2000-05-21 11:34 PM


James! haven't seen u here for ages!! ^_^
Yeah, probably true.. hehe.. well, u r right, I shouldn't be discouraged so easily.. Well, u know it isn't one of my best, and I only wrote it in a few minutes, 'coz of my mood.. haven't edited it or anything.

'elude'.. yeah, hehe.. I guess I do! ^_^ Well, it is a good word.. =P

Alle'cram hehe, yeah, bit like that, eh? ^_^ =P Mmm.. I don't remember seeing a lot of your poetry.. must read some... *_^
thank u..

Lynne

Jon Mewett
Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

9 posted 2000-05-22 04:15 AM


I'm CONFUSED and LONELY now  

Jon

[This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 05-22-2000).]

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