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That Perfect Phrase, a Simple Poem (For u_gene)
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563
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the morning sun enters my kitchen window, which begs to be washed, and finds me sitting, bent over the round oak pedestal table, filled with books, and papers and mail. i sip coffee from a mug on which a photo of my daughter smiles at me, as i attempt to compose, searching for just the right words, the proper cadence, but, this morn, they escape me. frustrated, i push the papers aside, and look up at the cloudless expanse of azure, not seeing the film on the window, nor the dust on the sill, sipping now lukewarm coffee, smoking one more cigarette. then suddenly it comes to me, the perfect phrase, the word i needed, and the rhythm just falls into place, and as the sun moves higher, i am again bent over the table, working with my passion, the potency of words. Kris the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Kris! I love it! Denise |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
well! ^_^ this is brilliant.. just brilliant! ^_^ beautiful writing.. (hehe, just popped in ta say hi to a few poems.. a break from my studies.. phew.. ^_^) love it.. Lynne |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
A great way to give somebody their muse back. Wonderful Jon |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I love this! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Denise, Lynn, John, and Lizzie, Thank you all for reading, and for your very kind comments. This is my first post here, and you've made me feel very welcome. Seems like a bunch of very nice poets gather here. Kris the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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patricianne Member
since 2000-05-04
Posts 66 |
Hi warmhrt, I enjoyed your poem, it was so down to earth and understandable. I guess I like to hear of what goes on in real lives, and on the every day basis. I'm fairly new here myself, so welcome. You are right, it is a nice bunch of poets.  |
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Wobbly Head Bob Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 299Virginia, USA |
Very well written! By now most people know I'm a poet of a structured taste and rhyming schemes, but I love to verbally applaud those who have skill to do what I cannot! By the way...could I borrow that kitchen table for a while, I need to write somethin' and can't! ;P |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Kris, Thank you so much for the lovely thought. It seems I must be drinking the wrong coffee. Maybe I need a little more of a jolt. The decaff just doesn't do it for me any more. Think I'll pass on the cigarette, though.  Thanks, ~Gene |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Warmhrt welcome to the pub!! This is a really cool poem. I would call it rather manipulative because when i read it the words manipulate my thoughts and memories so that it seems like i'm right there in the kitchen.... Although your words are simple,they're very elegant and bring up the perfect image. Like i said i feel as if i'm right there. VERY well done =] swamp And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
patricianne, WHB, u_gene, and swamp, I thank you all for reading and commenting. It is a simply worded poem, I know, but I hope it conveyed the feelings of initial frustration felt in writer's block, and the joy felt when the right words appear. The time span in this is short, but could apply to any length of time spent struggling to say what you'd like, and not being able to do so. Gene, you're wise to pass up the smoke.  WHB, you'd need a truck and a couple of friends...it weighs a ton! swamp...you can call it anything you want as long as you enjoyed it. patricianne, we can find our way here together among this group of friendly poets, being newbies, as they say. Thank you all again, Kris the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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